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threading the needle
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:52:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
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the needle,tight in my grasp
i thread it in and out of my flesh
no cotton
barbed wire cuts deep in my veins
i bathe in my blood
its dark and black
the darkness tarnished it
along time ago
i push it deep inside
its pricking my heart
i breathe faster
my heart pumping out the last of its blood
my body screaming out for a release
i dont give in to the pain
i go on
threading the needle
in and out
stitching back up my wounds
iam like a patchwork doll
whenever i tear i can be fixed
the seams coming apart
but the needle will fix it all
everything will be better
no tears dear child
your toy is fixed
you can play with her once again
but please try not to break her
or i'll have to thread the needle in her flesh again...
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2005-03-21 10:52:50]
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Re: threading the needle
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by xtremcalibur on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 11:03:36 AM AEST
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| Nice conclusion. I think with a bit more thought, this would have been really really good. I kind of saw the seamstress sitting there and doing the sewing. I can do that you know ~ being part of a poem. That is why I feel that this could be more with a little more passion. For me, I enjoyed it. If I don't feel it, I don't read it. Good job |
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Re: threading the needle
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by echo03 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 01:27:28 PM AEST
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Normally poems do not confusse me.....but i find myself lost......i belive i understand what you are saying..nice poem thou.........koren
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