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No More Blood
Contributed by
essentially9
on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 11:43:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
war
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No More Blood
Our dreams and lives were wasted
When your hopes were decimated.
We shed our blood for you
And had everything to lose.
Without caring, you turn away
With memories left to desecrate.
The memories fade into red
With every lie you have said.
For you, we gave our lives.
For you, we endured your strife.
We bled for revenge and liberty,
And hate's all you still see.
We fought your war,
And you give us nothing more
Than desecrated memories
Of what we did for thee.
Our lasting remembrance
Is the burning flag of France...
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2005-03-20 23:43:06]
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Re: No More Blood
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by venkat on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 01:35:18 AM AEST
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| A good dialogue which reflects the emotional feelings of soldiers and the futility of war ..well expressed..:-) venkat |
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Re: No More Blood
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by emystar on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 02:32:03 AM AEST
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Mind joggling but in a great way.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: No More Blood
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 04:34:09 AM AEST
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Jen this was really fantastic, you sure do know how to write poems.
It's so mind bogling sometimes how you keep on toping your other works. You clearly have a talent and plenty of it.
LOL Since i cant top Jarred's comment i'll leave things up to hear.
Jane |
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Re: No More Blood
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by Les4567 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 07:09:52 PM AEST
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Your poems are always amazing. You always have such a strong message behind your work. Truly fantastic. I loved it.
~Les |
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Re: No More Blood
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by secretwind on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 11:56:51 PM AEST
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| Excellent |
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Re: No More Blood
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 05:11:07 PM AEST
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| the thing i loved most about this write (and i can probably safely say this about all your stuff) is your extremely strong ability to pound in the meaning of your poem into the last few lines. you have an amazing sense of how a conclusion should be written. I really loved that. This poem in particular had a really good message, one that was emotionally toned which made the conclusion have that much more of an impact. Awesome stuff, loved how it tasted too... :P |
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