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Making you empty
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
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Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 10:42:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Angry again
inside the soul
I poke and prick
at your heart with my darkness
I rip your love to shreds
making you bleed from my attacks
I take all I can
until there is nothing but an emptiness
inside of you
JENNI
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Re: Making you empty
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 10:49:50 PM AEST
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| I could really feel your anger and frustration in this. Your emotion really comes out in so few words. Nice work. |
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Re: Making you empty
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by emystar on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 11:10:15 PM AEST
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I can certainly relate. I know when I've had enuff, God help the************that's in my way best move. Still i have to things till my patience is empty as u discribe here.
Awesome.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Making you empty
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by electrique_poet on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 11:48:59 PM AEST
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well said, i think everybody finds themselves in a situation such as this where for one reason or another we try and drag someone down with us
'I rip your love to shreds
making you bleed from my attacks'
the honesty of no remorse, so few words, beautiful
... in words electrique |
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Re: Making you empty
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 04:52:43 AM AEST
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Such an emotive write clearly describing you're emotions so well.
Nicely done Jen.
Jane |
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Re: Making you empty
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 03:14:56 PM AEST
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I've never experienced this, I don't think... but your poem certainly makes me want to notice this kind of feeling when it arises...
hmmm...
Lots of love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: Making you empty
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by tx_graffiti_gal on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 04:18:02 PM AEST
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WOW.. when your mad you get even...I like
I rip your love to shreds making you bleed from my attacks.. ouch ! |
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Re: Making you empty
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by Sinned on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 08:06:44 PM AEST
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Until there is nothing but emptiness inside of you.
complete emptiness--Depression-that deep dark abyss. hat a terrible wish.
Grat write.
Sinned |
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Re: Making you empty
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 09:21:01 AM AEST
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| A very impressive descriptive write. Well done. |
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Re: Making you empty
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th August 2006 @ 08:58:08 PM AEST
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piercing pain, Jenn. ..
Horrible way to feel, though expertly expressed here.
The imagery is masterful ... very emotive. (and angry ..)
I hope you are happier today .. : )
~Breezy |
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