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Undeserving
Contributed by
afraid_of_fear
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Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 06:07:17 PM in AEST
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The truth comes hurtling towards me at a snail’s pace
The truth, wrapped up in my own distorted face
And I threw it all away, so long ago
Threw everything away that meant so much
The pain in my soul messed up my mind
So I lost everything, nothing left inside to find
And I poured out all these tears
And choked upon my bleeding heart
Nothing can replace the emptiness I feel
You can’t stitch me back together and make me heal
It’s so real, so true, but nobody believes these lies
And the nonexistence swallows me whole
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Re: Undeserving
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by sick_n_twisted on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 07:00:58 PM AEST
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i like this poem this is how i used to feel all the time im sorry if u really do feel like that and well writen thanks for reading what i have to say ,later'
Denise |
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Re: Undeserving
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by Overstated on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 07:07:48 AM AEST
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| when reading this i felt it was a really honest piece of writing and that appealed to me - i really enjoyed the read |
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Re: Undeserving
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 03:33:52 PM AEST
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While this may be short it packed a punch
more powerful than a poem twice its size.
Wow this was awesome and with lines like,
"And I poured out all these tears
And choked upon my bleeding heart"
how can I not like it? Yes this was great stuff.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Undeserving
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 02:15:29 PM AEST
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Great job. You created some very pwerful images. My favorite lines were:
"And choked upon my bleeding heart."
"And the nonexistance swallows me."
Very strong write. I really like it.
~*Naomi of Night*~ |
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Re: Undeserving
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 03:14:35 PM AEST
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deep, intense, heartfelt, beautifully written as always charlotte, hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Undeserving
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by heartless_soul on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 03:13:43 PM AEST
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| this was truly full of meening and emotion, it was well writen and had great imager. I will pray that you will feel better and I hope that you do. Be well. |
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Re: Undeserving
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by ruby_star_angel on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 06:16:24 PM AEST
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Oh hun, this poem has so much emotion and I understand completely how it feels. I'm here for you, and many other of your friends. We'll help you if when you need it, okay? *hugs* Take care, hun. Hope you can look up in the future.
xoxox Mandy |
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