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Encrimsoned Wings
Contributed by
essentially9
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Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 03:32:06 PM in AEST
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Encrimsoned Wings
The bloody wings
Of the fallen angel bring
The rapture of desire
Enticed in black fire.
She uses the edges that are serrated
To clip her wings that are desecrated
With self hate that never fades
Or dulls like her razor blades.
She fell from the sky
And got trapped in a web of lies.
She believed all of your spite
And now is not able to fly.
Her blood is on your hands,
And her life is buried in time's sands.
You're burned in the rapture of her desire
To see you enticed in her black fire.
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 03:44:41 PM AEST
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Greatly put Jen as always....I really enjoyed this one as normal and yeah...well...it's normal of you..lol
Great job...again
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 03:56:56 PM AEST
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wow an amazing write.
I really like this one.well done. |
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 04:03:34 PM AEST
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wow what a good, descriptive poem. I loved
how you started it off it just drew me right into
the poem. Yeah that was great stuff.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by reprobate on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 09:22:44 PM AEST
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and so the circle closes...justice, in it's own ironic sense
good read
my thanks for sharing |
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by venkat on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 02:19:07 AM AEST
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| Especially the last stanza blazing with black fire...l0ve to read you Jen. :-) venkat |
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:40:18 AM AEST
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I really really love this....can I suggest a change in the third stanza???
She fell from the sk(ies)
And got trapped in a web of lies.
She believed all of your spite
And now (has lost her flight.)
Just a thought, I never know for sure when something is done for a reason. |
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Re: Encrimsoned Wings
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 10:55:58 AM AEST
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She uses the edges that are serrated
To clip her wings that are desecrated
With self hate that never fades
Or dulls like her razor blades.
very nice...i really liked this...nice job...
Auryn
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