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A Man's Tears
Contributed by
KishaLovesCare126
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Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 02:37:13 PM in AEST
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A Man's Tears
3/19/2005
1:34 PM
On a cold night,
The stars are bright,
A man holds his lover’s head,
Inside his hands,
Tears of sadness fall,
Down his cheeks on to,
Her lips blue and cracked,
Winter froze her hands numb,
Stilled her heart once warm with love,
With his hands in the air,
He says a quiet prayer,
“Dear Lord you took my love,
From me please, please keep her,
Protected and loved.”
He seen stars shoot,
Across the sky his prayer,
Answered he smiled a little,
Lifting her cold body in to his arms,
Bringing her to lay to rest,
Shifting red roses upon the casket,
He reads from a poem she always loved,
“Desirable lady, your love rare
Touching with my fingers your
Golden locks of honey hair,
I remember you walking in the stars
Somewhere beautiful, magical and free,
How your eyes taught my heart to skip a beat,
Your lips are smooth tasting of wine,
Interlacing our hands together we’re forever
We danced in the moon together,
We were guided by the ever love,
Now I shall see you every day your warmth is in me still
Walking down the path to eternity.”
© Care Strom
Copyright ©
KishaLovesCare126
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2005-03-19 14:37:13]
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by pixie on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 02:45:45 PM AEST
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wow that was sad and moving, a greatly written poem tho
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 03:05:23 PM AEST
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yay you took my advice for the title, how cool is that LOL.
You know i likes this a lot so no need to remind myself again.
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by JacobsKK on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 07:36:11 PM AEST
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| Very moving, and sad. Good write. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by BlindRomantic on
Monday, 1st August 2005 @ 01:36:19 AM AEST
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| good |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th August 2005 @ 03:45:04 PM AEST
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| It is a moving poem...beautifully written-the way that it should be (if the sitution need arise at all) and not the way it is. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by XxKittyKat8239xX on
Friday, 2nd September 2005 @ 08:55:10 AM AEST
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| Wow, that's a beautiful write. I wrote something similar to that about someone mourning a lover or a family member or friend.. It definitely touched me. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by car21221 on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 01:17:07 PM AEST
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| this is a very heart touching poem |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Gracen2260 on
Tuesday, 10th January 2006 @ 07:28:44 PM AEST
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| The best poetry ever written comes from the heart. Very well written and touching as well |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by tVirus on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 12:48:41 AM AEST
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| this poem was pretty cool, it forced a visual image out of the words, thats what i liked. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by midnightwriter on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 10:34:22 AM AEST
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| loved the adjectives, to be able to capture an image, feeling with words is powerful. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by candysears on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 08:30:36 PM AEST
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A very powerful write...Imagery is very good.
God Bless! |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by SIMMI on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 04:16:48 PM AEST
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DAT SO SAD
BUT THA WAY U WROTE U CAN REALLY PICTURE IT IN UR HEAD |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by holstein on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 04:41:55 PM AEST
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| Well written and indeed a moving poem. Clearly stirred to greatness by your own emotional experience, with the man and losing of his lover. beautiful. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by kyle0828 on
Monday, 16th October 2006 @ 08:00:40 PM AEST
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| Great imagery, loved the ending |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th October 2006 @ 06:02:49 PM AEST
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| This is a really moving poem. I can really sense the love that the man had for his lady and the tenderness! I loved this!!! |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by behind0this0mask on
Sunday, 7th January 2007 @ 12:01:54 AM AEST
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| very good |
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by Gilbert92 on
Saturday, 25th August 2007 @ 02:46:11 PM AEST
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Wow this is beautiful!
I love how the Adjectives make you feel as if your there...
Very Touching :) |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by willwinuk on
Wednesday, 28th November 2007 @ 08:54:56 AM AEST
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| Great poem, keep up your good work :) |
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by texasw97 on
Wednesday, 25th June 2008 @ 09:58:45 PM AEST
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| Hey. This is good. Take care. |
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by akakin on
Sunday, 3rd May 2009 @ 07:26:18 PM AEST
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love the line "her lips blue and cracked", I can envision the image of her lips cold and blue..
gr8.. I luv it |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by kingbee7g on
Saturday, 7th November 2009 @ 11:34:44 AM AEST
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| For all the hurt that I like to write about I can only thank God that I haven't had to tackle the above subject matter. Its emotional content gives it integrity. |
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by TimeKeeper44 on
Wednesday, 14th April 2010 @ 11:29:55 AM AEST
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| wow! thats incredible, you've got a gift for poetry! |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Sheveg on
Saturday, 29th May 2010 @ 01:49:58 PM AEST
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It sounds like she was very special to you.
Sherry |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by mysellf on
Tuesday, 22nd June 2010 @ 11:01:36 PM AEST
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| Great Poem, strong imagery. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by allie_07 on
Tuesday, 25th January 2011 @ 07:07:17 PM AEST
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| very powerful! i loved it. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Child0fDarkness on
Thursday, 10th March 2011 @ 03:53:36 PM AEST
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| Favorite i have read so far :) |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by allie_07 on
Friday, 18th March 2011 @ 12:01:29 PM AEST
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| this is beautiful. |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th March 2011 @ 02:26:12 PM AEST
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| very sad but extremely moving |
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Re: A Man's Tears
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by marlenarawrxd on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2011 @ 07:15:38 PM AEST
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| This is so moving, and so amazing. Well done. |
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