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Final Words
Contributed by
KishaLovesCare126
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Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 01:29:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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3/11/2005
Raindrops falling sighing in the night,
Slip inside your dreams
Forget about the fright,
Crawl over drowning despair,
Wrap your self in bitterness
Tears will streak your broken soul.
Memories linger inside you're room,
Stinging burns your cold-wrenched heart,
Leafs in the darkness softly moan- crying out,
You smashed every picture, vase and glass,
In bare feet you walk on them,
Painfully numb to feel objects slicing in.
Winds whistle a sorrowful song,
You can't pick yourself off the wooden floor,
Leaking through the slammed door - your heart,
Fighting with your thoughts,
Draping shades crimson blocking out sunlight,
Turning over in your bed,
Before you die you say your final words,
"Love kills the heart, not the pain."
Care Strom
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Re: Final Words
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by emystar on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 04:10:55 AM AEST
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If they r all like this one, take as long as u need 'cause u have impressed me with this one and gotta tell ya now I'm hooked.
When I read theses words I see a little 4 year old mad as hellwalking on my momma's hot coals where she'd done laundry on with her big ole black iron pot. My youngest brother and me should have twins cause I wasiorn right after him. Yeah she was a very angry little girl 'cause her bubba went to school and she had to wait a year to go.
Momma knew what I'd done and she also knew I was bare foot and it didn't burn or hurt me in any way. It's amazing how pain interlocks as we read other writers.
This one is a masterpeice that goes deep into one soul and jus lays it out there. Count yourself fortunate 'cause it takes some kindda writing to touch me and this write touched deeper than any other that's dipped onto my being this deep so take your time but by all means write cause your writing ranks up there the best and goes way over the tops of some.
Well didn't mean to write a book but this is so many things and one of those writes that when read it touch each-n-every one that reads it in it's own way.
huggs,
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Re: Final Words
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by mina-1 on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 08:00:45 AM AEST
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A strong, powerful and emotional write.
The imagery u cast on ur reader is absolutely great. An excellent piece of poetry, written so well. Can't wait to read ur next one.
hugs,
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Re: Final Words
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by Kie-Kie on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 01:44:45 PM AEST
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Wow
I'm just simply at a loss for words that was so well written and just amazing
The emotion you convey to us through this poem is so strong it's truely inspiring
I love it... 5 stars :D
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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