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Dieing Again
Contributed by
MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa
on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 10:19:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Too much time with you
Is my suicide
beautiful eyes, so many lies
Take me back
To when I was you
And if I'm only worth 94% of what you are
Then let me fall
because that 94% of whats left in me
will only bring me down
I'm walking on shards of shattered glass
as my shadow bleeds
voices calling to me
because the 94% of me
isn't worth living
I call to what is never home
and await an answer, retrieve me one last moment
becuase the 6% of whats left
needs this life
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MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa
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2005-03-16 22:19:50]
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Re: Dieing Again
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by MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 10:24:56 PM AEST
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THIS IS THE AUTHOR OF THIS: CHANGE THE LAST VERSES TO: BECAUSE THE 6% OF WHATS LEFT OF ME
NEEDS THIS LIE
THANX PEOPLE! |
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Re: Dieing Again
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 10:30:49 PM AEST
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This is pretty good. I like the the lines:
"I'm walking on shards of shattered glass
as my shadow bleeds"
You're revised ending is pretty good as well.
One question though, why 94% and 6%? |
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Re: Dieing Again
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by brains_of_the_insane on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 10:52:16 PM AEST
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| I really like your writing stlye, I can relate to what are you saying in the poem. Good write! |
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Re: Dieing Again
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 01:34:48 AM AEST
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| hmm this is pretty good, i was actually going into this poem ready to ridicule you for your authors comment, but i liked this. |
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