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Waiting for Heaven
Contributed by
essentially9
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Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 09:08:08 PM in AEST
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Waiting for Heaven
The revelations of reality,
And what is to be
Comes to pass under a sky of flames
With death as the ashes of pain.
New wounds are open,
And cares are unspoken
As blood drips from his hands
Embraced in time's sands.
Sin's buried deep in blood,
And prompts the eminent flood.
Life's passing away with change
Only to stay the same.
You commit this suicide
With evanescent cries
That it's a sin to end life
And to woefully die.
You hold on to conviction
While reminiscing of the crucifixion
That took away everything
And replaced it with nothing.
Night eludes the day
As he takes his life away
To form new expectations
In the unfolding revelations.
You died for him
With an unforgivable sin.
Now evil has its reign
As goodness wanes.
You were crucified by your own hand
With twisted compassion.
You leave Satan in control of all land
With his merciless incompassion.
But all of this was meant to happen...
Copyright ©
essentially9
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2005-03-16 21:08:08]
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by write_whenit_hurts on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 10:01:21 PM AEST
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| wow...just wow. i'm so taken awa with that! o wow, that's probly one of the best poems i've ever heard! jeez i can't believe that's so good...i'm glad i'm a priveledged one to have read that...that was absolutely amazing!!! |
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by loveisendless on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 12:40:29 AM AEST
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THIS WAS REALLY COOL! YOU HAVE A GREAT TALENT FOR GRABBING SOMEBODIES ATTENTION!! I HAVE A SAYING & THIS ROCKING POEM REMINDS ME OF IT . . . RETRO TO LIVE - IS EVIL,
& SO LIVED - THE DEVIL !!! ROCK ON MY FRIEND!!!!
DAN!!!!! |
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by venkat on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 12:55:19 AM AEST
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Dearest lady, you are very daring to write such a poem..I enjoyed this totally. :-) venkat
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by emystar on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 04:01:45 AM AEST
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Very different and thought provoking.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 09:52:42 AM AEST
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Wow you two combined each others talents to create something so amazing and perfect, it was dark and amazingly writen..
Jane |
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by Les4567 on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 10:24:05 PM AEST
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I cant even describe how good that was. You two should write together more often. Not that you arent both amazing writers by yourselves. You two should pare up and write a book of poems or something. I am dumbfounded and speechless. If only I had the talent to write something so moving. Truly Truly Truly amazing.....Remarkable so many words could describe this poem. Best poem I have ever read. Wow rambling to make a long story short...I LOVED IT!
NEVER EVER
STOP
WRITING!!!!
~Les |
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Re: Waiting for Heaven
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 09:14:19 PM AEST
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| This is wicked. Excellent job you two. :o) *S* Cynthia |
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