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Darkened
Contributed by
unrestrained19
on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:14:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Darkened “Hole”
Let me take you to a dark place,
where raw emotions ooze from every pore.
Confusion laced with agony,
ripping me from limb to limb.
Desperation infused with sorrow,
permeating my every surface
facial expressions grotesquely coNtorteD.
Years and years down a darkened “hole”.
Who am I?
Where am I?
Stripped bare, alone, no air,
suffocated by pain.
Hell’s grip stronger then salvation.
Hope’s face mocking my every move,
slitting my insides to reveal my soul.
Is it there?
Do I have one?
Angst and glory dance upon my wet body,
let’s get serious with this one.
In and out of consciousness for awhile.
Thoughts too delbmuj to hide.
Misery loves company so he brought requited tears.
The cleansing process is long,
it’s___hard for ____light to _____penetrate__
throughtangledwebsof i s o l a t i o n.
Blood runs down the drain.
Summing up another day.
It is time for bed in this mundane life.
Sleep now mocks my entire existence.
Copyright ©
unrestrained19
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2005-03-16 13:14:13]
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Re: Darkened
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by Levi on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:35:07 PM AEST
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Ummm...that was interesting. The use of combining and seperating letters near the end, the weird spellings and mixtures of capital and lowercase definatly made it interesting. The death oozing stuff is a little over used in my mind but I'm probably just reacting to the extreme uses of such stuff in other poems.
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Re: Darkened
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by Rocks on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 07:37:44 AM AEST
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| cool write. |
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