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A Change To Victory
Contributed by
simmy
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Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:36:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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So scared and alone,
shievering as its so cold.
Her heart is broken,
shattered and sold.
Weeping with pain,
as sleep is lost.
Nightmares cant haunt her now,
its only her and the bitter frost.
Her eyes are sliping,
she loses as they close.
Yet she seems to win,
dreaming he is giving her a perfect white rose.
Wakes up,
and shes warm.
happy at last,
as she forgets the storm.
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simmy
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2005-03-16 01:36:35]
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Re: A Change To Victory
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by wolfman on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 02:51:35 PM AEST
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welcom to YPDC, you wil never be without a friend here, so please do enjoy yourself.
this was an amazingly discriptive poem, the imagery you desplayed was astounding for the length of this pieace, though the true point of this situation wasnt clear I still feel for her and am glad that she made it through the storm.
this was a good poem, but still a little too short for my taste but if it were longer then I am sure that it would have lost what it turnd out to be, thank yoiu for posting, and please do post again soon, be strong and God bless.
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Re: A Change To Victory
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 11:26:56 PM AEST
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| Very well written first post. I enjoyed it very much. Welcome to the site and I look forward to reading more from you. |
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Re: A Change To Victory
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 01:51:09 PM AEST
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Very enjoyable. I really liked lines 9-12. Really good.
Take care.
David |
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