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Suffocation by Hopelessness
Contributed by
essentially9
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Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:22:32 PM in AEST
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Suffocation by Hopelessness
Loneliness suffocates me
And expectation rapes my dreams
Till there is nothing left to be
But the victim of misery
I can no longer breathe
All of my hopes are broken at the seams
And blackness is what they bleed
Because there is nothing left in me
I have nothing more to give
And there is no reason to live
Because everything was taken from me
And I still drown in what will never be
Because what once was is no longer reality
It is the void of all the things that fulfill dreams
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by Sirena_Degana on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:25:11 PM AEST
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| i found you my love..and along with it a very deep depressing GORGEOUS poem....great job.... |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by electrique_poet on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:35:47 PM AEST
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a moment of hopelessness captured quite beautifully, a nice write
... in words electrique |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:45:22 PM AEST
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deep, sad, emotional and beautiful, powerful write
pix xx |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:47:04 PM AEST
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I can certainly relate. A masterpeice as we all have these moments.
the well of writing is and endless fountain and that's reason to keep on keeping on.
We need u right here.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:49:55 PM AEST
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This was really good, I like how you write. hey Ive just wrote a poem to redeem myself over all the crap ones youve read lol. x
4 and a half out of 5 |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:51:00 PM AEST
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| Sad and moving write. Captivating and powerful. Excellent work. I love this dark piece. |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 09:01:12 PM AEST
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| A wonderfully written poem, I can almost feel the dispair. |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 09:32:53 PM AEST
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I know that void
it's end;ess....
well written.
The Wind |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 10:42:57 PM AEST
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Hmph...the little I have to actually say to tell you, you did another amazing job jen...and its always this way.....
Clark |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:15:11 AM AEST
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| well presented..deeply touches the heart. :-) venkat |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 05:48:04 AM AEST
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What an emotive powerfull write Jen, this is such an captivating write.
I liked it..
Jane |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 04:46:26 PM AEST
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Jennifer, I really liked the very first line, it sucked me in. "Loneliness suffocates me" and I liked how if you read each stanzas first line it made such a statement.
~~Loneliness suffocates me
I can no longer breathe
I have nothing to give
Because everything was taken from me~~
That was really cool Jen, Much peace to you my friend. |
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Re: Suffocation by Hopelessness
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by Les4567 on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 09:53:42 PM AEST
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You are an amazing poet. Everytime I read one of your poems it consumes me. I loved every aspect of this poem. Truly a remarkable write. Please, I beg of you never stop writing, the day you do will be a very sad day. Keep up the brilliant work!
~Leslie |
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