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Unseen
Contributed by
FleurdeSang
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Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:05:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Someone, please save me from myself,
Anyone, shine light into this worthless existence…
A tired voice echoes through the fog,
Realizing it is my own…
Pay no mind to the voice of Reason,
It’s Deceit disguised as Truth…
Wear a mask of deception,
Pretend that everything is alright…
Paint your face with happiness,
Place sparkling glee in your eyes,
Take a picture,
And let the agony hide beneath hoax…
Seeping through every pore, arid self-hate,
Lamentations of a silent illusion,
I slowly fade away… INVISIBLE…
Wretched being, look at what you have become,
Gaze into the mirror,
See how it laughs?
Reflections of a soul-less fiend,
A laughing corpse with a disguise of lies…
Beat me down with your iron fists,
Tear me down with your ruthless dagger-like words,
Bleed me of every impurity inside…
Take my broken heart and consume every bit of it,
Relish the hatred I have for you,
Savor the unbearable pain I’ve withheld for so long…
You, yes you,
Creature that I must call father,
The birth of my undying despise,
The reason for this sorrow…
I HATE YOU…
Copyright ©
FleurdeSang
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2005-03-15 20:05:27]
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Re: Unseen
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:07:03 PM AEST
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deep, dark and so deep, great poem, *hugs* for you hun
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Re: Unseen
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 08:18:20 PM AEST
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I could say this about my mother..
Very strong, such anger...it feeds me.
Exellent |
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Re: Unseen
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 09:00:34 PM AEST
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| Excellent. I love the intensity and deep emotion put into this. I loved it. |
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Re: Unseen
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 09:15:39 PM AEST
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| A good poem, powerful, intense, yet disturbing. If this is personal experience, my heart goes out to you, but at the same time, I admire your ability to put your feelings into words in such a powerful way. |
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Re: Unseen
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:09:36 AM AEST
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gave me chills with this one. Im sorry that your so full of pain noone deserves this. I know that you can move past this though hang in there and if you fall Ill pick you up and carry you along if needed. Every one od your poems are so full of spunk and emotion doesnt matter the subject thats what makes your works a masterpiece always
a huge hug for you girlfriend
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Re: Unseen
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:12:51 AM AEST
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wow this was dripping with venom. I liked
how it was written but not that or anyone else
could hate someone so deeply. Really good
poem I am glad you were able to release
your hate in a constructive manner.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Unseen
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 05:43:06 PM AEST
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sigh.... the truth of this is bittersweet. The pain in this is awful, yet described and expressed so well by your written word.
A shame such strong emotions often bring out the best writes in us... |
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Re: Unseen
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 06:52:59 PM AEST
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how can one be so blind as to not see the emotion within the eyes that you surely cast upon them. Even if it is only for a moment ... how can he not see what he has done ? How can the shame that must certainally be his mantle, be worn for so long ... he deserves to be emersed in all of the negativity he has bestowed upon you ... he needs to swim within the darkness. Be strong Stephy ... you can move beyond him.
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