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Heaven
Contributed by
wyrd_faerie
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Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 05:00:00 PM in AEST
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Bittersweet promises broken by a torn up trust
Feelings fallen, memories turned to dust
Raw emotion held back, heads pounding with fear
Silver keys open silver locks to transparent tears
Truth all around you, surrounded by lies
Angels laughing but you hear their cries
False imagery, fake smiles, hidden thoughts
They all give up so easily, but you see how they fought
Dressed in white with a halo on your head
Invisible chains tie you to your deathbed
The sun seems a little too bright today, grass too green
Sitting here, this is the worst place you’ve ever been
Hating the smiles and the jokes everywhere
Sickly sweet images, feelings of death and despair
Look behind the beauty, see the disguise
They say you’re lucky, they never opened their eyes
Candy dreams destroyed by a torn up trust
Feelings fallen, memories turned to dust
Raw emotion held back, heads pounding with fear
Silver locks close silver gates, climb the walls, there’s no way out of here
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Re: Heaven
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by OreO on
Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 05:04:02 PM AEST
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Wow....this is so sad and has so much hurt and pain in it....Candy dreams destroyed by a torn up trust...that's so deep....the whole poem is deep with such hurt....it brought tears to my eyes...which i've had to many today to count ......your poetry here is very heartfelt and touched me deeply...thanks for sharing this one..
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Re: Heaven
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 07:39:38 PM AEST
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Wow, this was so well written I could taste the fear and anger in your words. I'm a bit confused though are u saying heaven is a bad place? I like the line "Angels laughing but you hear their cries" i've laughed many times wishing ppl could see inside and see the tears running down. This was very well written i'm amazed and it strikes a chord deep within me.
- Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Heaven
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by LOWMAN613 on
Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 10:20:43 PM AEST
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| Very touching write,I surely hope Heaven isnt this way,What the heck we have to look forward for! Good write though! Christina |
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Re: Heaven
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by fallensilence on
Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 06:06:45 PM AEST
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| this is one of my favorite poems that i've read so far on this site. |
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Re: Heaven
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by Roshie on
Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 08:36:08 PM AEST
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| Oh, this poems is so well written, you have talant! Filled with emotion spinning around in your head all you can do is write! Thats what writting is for, if only more people would write their emotion down, we would then have a word filled with beautiful poets! Keep smiling *hugz* =) |
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Re: Heaven
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 08:08:59 AM AEST
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i loved this from the first time i ever read it... i am so scared at the thought there might be a heaven.. this is so true in my mind..
love you...
xxx
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