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Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 03:51:27 PM in AEST
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Wonder opens wide
Beneath blue eyes
And she is all of everything
Mountain streams
Her teardrops seem
Underneath a loving sky
Even when
she doesn't cry
Whispers of the wilderness
To the siren's call, she consents
Footsteps falling on crackling leaves
A respite there within the trees
As raindrops descend from the sky
She closes her eyes... and smiles
Maybe, she thinks, as they fall
She needn't really cry at all
~
Wonder opens wide
Behind brown eyes
And she is all of every being
Liquid moonbeams
Her teardrops seem
Underneath a moving sky
Even though
she will not cry
Whispers of the days now spent
To the echoes then her heart is lent
Midnight visions of stardust dreams
Hope is found in what is seen
The roof alive with the sound of rain
She smiles... and lets go the pain
Maybe, she thinks, the sky does know
The tears then, she needn't show
~
Wonder opens wide
Under a night sky
And it becomes everything
As raindrops stream
Their teardrops seem
To be falling from sky
This is how
They learned to cry
One journeys back across the leaves
Stepping out from inside the trees
Just as the other slows her pace
And arrives herself in that same place
They find each other at the end of the road
Standing together in the rain, they know
That falling down are tears not cried
There, where pavement meets the sky
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 03:54:24 PM AEST
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This is a stunningly beautiful write. So expressive and the imagry is vivid... A masterpiece and one of the best I've read in a while. Thanks for sharing.
Take Care
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 04:27:53 PM AEST
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| Such a work of art here. It's amazing the things that hold so much meaning in everyday life. The leaves, the rain, tears, it was all such an emotional piece, and it really came to a head in that last stanza. I loved this. If your sister doesnt, make sure u really pinch her! lol great work though. |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by girltranscended on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 06:18:49 PM AEST
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O.K. first let me say I have never received a poem for my birthday (I don't think) and I LOVE IT!!!!
Your title says it all and that IS exactly where we would meet - I am happy that we meet in the same place at the end (and that we are not crying!)
It's amazing how you've woven in the tears and the rain. (And that you're actually standing out in the rain at the end??!!! (I bet you have an umbrella!)
Thank you so very much for this!
"As raindrops descend from the sky
She closes her eyes… and smiles"
This is so very much ME and I am so happy you understand and love who I really am!!!
Alright now - it better start raining pronto cause I AM about to cry! I love you! and Thank you!!!!!
GT :)
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 06:34:50 PM AEST
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OMG! This is wonderfully done!!
It says so much both happy and sad. It is beautifully woven. I am so impressed....Incredible! |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by freckle on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 10:27:44 PM AEST
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What a lovely write...so full of beautiful imagery. Just a wonderful piece of prose...what a lovely birthday gift!
Carol |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by venkat on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 01:28:32 AM AEST
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lovely imagery..lovely poem..it is like a rain
of liquid moonbeams..Happy birth day..Best wishes to both of you:-)venkat |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 03:18:31 AM AEST
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beautiful poetry loved the title too.
johnny |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Rhymingron on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 09:22:12 AM AEST
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| Ah, a real poet. I love it, it's everything a poem should be. Do you write music? This would be a great song. I look forward to reading more of your work. |
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by Mangs on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 10:19:53 AM AEST
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| Awesome...awesome write...a beautiful way to describe a beautiful person....shows how much u love her |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by lovesucks on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 01:30:39 PM AEST
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| This was awesome, sounds like my sister, what a beautiful piece of work. |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 02:16:18 PM AEST
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* Nods with understanding, viewing the artistic process as it happens *
The muses ... they speak so uniquely at times. There are times that what they want to say is not the way they say it, and sometimes they just speak too softly to hear ... I would say that once distraction faded ... they spoke to you and these words carry their volumes.
Nazzy ~
( really likes where this went ) |
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by sweet_lil_b2003 on
Monday, 14th March 2005 @ 08:54:23 PM AEST
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im verry differnt fromm everyone else you left you comments and I just want to let you no I was interested in your poem..it was blazin ~~Crystal~~
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 10:09:26 AM AEST
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Gosh hun, this is truly beautiful...
Honestly, your writing takes my breath away, and this is one of the best, it is spoken with such love.
And amazing write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 10:25:58 PM AEST
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From a Pisces perspective, this is reflective, in a way. You say you see the beauty of the world through her eyes, but I see it through your words (relating to her eyes).
N_F
*Wants that to make sense, somehow* |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 10:34:01 AM AEST
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A beautiful poem, with a wonderful message of love and connection. The descriptions of nature interwoven into the descriptions of your sister are fabulous.
An exquisit write
Willofree |
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 12:23:44 AM AEST
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I've been meaning to give this a properly attentive read for a while now, but somehow couldn't find the opportunity. I have, now, and am impressed. This is well-said, and beautiful. Bravo, I say!
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 05:07:47 AM AEST
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Ughh why must I be always late for a birthday poems *Sighs*
Anyways… I thought this was clearly written to perfection Snemmy, you’re words speaks so much it moves peoples hearts on the feelings you where trying to signify. Great word usage as always and I just love the following lines below.
This is how
They learned to cry
Such a small line but it speaks so much.
Thanks for sharing this with all of us, and happy belated b-day GT
Jane.
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 05:38:00 AM AEST
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This is excellent work...
containing magic, beauty, emotions... and all that is often inexpressible.
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 11:44:16 PM AEST
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| Such a sweet and beautiful write. Wonderful job. |
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by outsider on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 06:13:41 PM AEST
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| Everyone else has already said it, truly an excellent write, very vivid, very well done. |
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Re: Where The Pavement Meets The Sky
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by brokenbutterfly on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 03:12:24 PM AEST
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this is such a gorgeous poem- probably one of the best i've ever read. the imagery it evokes is brilliant and your sister is lucky to have you... it really shows how much you love and know her.
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 14th June 2006 @ 11:02:09 PM AEST
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Wow!!! Two birthday poems in a row! This is a poem of awesome beauty and brilliant metaphors. I bet she loved it. One of the best birthday presents one can receive are the ones that are made for them and made from the heart. Your sweet heart!!! You really have one and it shows magnificently in this one!
Timbo
(who is very glad you shared it with us too!!!!)
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