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Idol
Contributed by
faith_my_eyes
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Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 11:51:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I see it...
I want it...
I need it...
I can almost touch it...
(Can I have it?)
Glittering gold
beautifully polished
(it was previously tarnished)
by my desire
for things so much prettier
(the beautiful idol)
lovelier
(It's captivating)
to my
roving eyes
(I am attracted to what I can see)
It calls..
(What a beautiful sound it makes)
I cling...
(What is the vicelike grip it has on me?)
I bow deep
and worship.
(It seems so worth)
You abhor my spiritual harlotry
(but didn't You say You'd give me the desires of my heart?)
And you reveal my core
(I'm supposed to desire You more?)
You cast down my Baals
(Please don't take them away)
I beg....
Please don't take them away...
I see the face of the One
Who suffered shame
for this very idol...
(Father forgive me...)
That this idol...
(My desire)
Cast away You.
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Re: Idol
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 12:55:52 AM AEST
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| This was written in such a unique way, i can honestly say i've been opened up to a bunch of different writing formats today. this one was also dealing with something I think everyone can relate to, because we all do it. hopefully, they also do that last part and ask for forgiveness. Great topic here, loved the write! |
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Re: Idol
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 01:53:28 AM AEST
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What an amazing write Emily, the subject sometimes is hard for some of us to write and you clearly do it with ease.
This was deffinately writen well, im glad i was able to read this.
Jane ^_^ |
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Re: Idol
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 10:00:50 AM AEST
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Wow... this is fantastic Em. This is something..it calls to me.
I cannot say which part I love most... I love it all. The start and end are different though...those are the parts that show you.
Amazing write, my friend.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Idol
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 11:11:15 PM AEST
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I found this quite powerful. The verse style gives it a strong flow, and the conflict of the unredeemed and redeemed voices within are very well-expressed, as well as familiar.
A strong, well-written work. Bravo, my friend!
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 01:38:29 AM AEST
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A rather powerful piece, as well as gesture of remorse.
I can almost entirely relate… yet lacking much of the latter.
The concepts of obsession and addiction, which arise from this piece, oblige me to contemplate what it is that has taken you away from the worship of God.
There is a specific impenetrable nature surrounding the idol them self.
It is only within our human nature to clarify obscurity, thus penetrating the intangible.
I think the use of brackets are a useful tool, here especially, which further elaborate or offer an addition of information to the audience, for the effective comprehension of this piece.
My favourite words.
“(it was previously tarnished)
by my desire
for things so much prettier
(the beautiful idol)
(I am attracted to what I can see)
You abhor my spiritual harlotry”
–I often feel as such… attracted to beauty, despite beauty’s consequences.
“And you reveal my core
(I'm supposed to desire You more?)
I see the face of the One
Who suffered shame
for this very idol...”
A hint… yet I am still oblivious to any answer.
I very much enjoyed this piece, and feel that your faith has made this piece stronger.
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Re: Idol
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 04:24:55 PM AEST
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Bravo! What a unique style, and a testiment to your creativity. The essence of our struggle with the temptations of glitter (desires) in our lives.
This is a fantastic write on an crucial issue in our lives.
Well done!
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 11:19:54 PM AEST
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| I like this, its very cool |
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Re: Idol
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 06:39:06 PM AEST
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The best way I can describe this, I think, is... quietly potent. This is rather exactly how I prefer poetry... honest, if not entirely revealing. Though you stopped short of laying it ALL onto the page, you've given enough that it is brave from my perspective. My! Em - I can hear your voice with this piece....
... and it couldn't be more lovely. Beautiful work from a beautiful soul.
Liking this very much,
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Re: Idol
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by Sinned on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 05:42:53 AM AEST
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Littleblondgirl
Wonderful very catholic in your thinking.Meaning universal. We are all tempted by our desiers and material objects and inside we know true peace and happiness is not there.
Good write.
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 11:35:04 PM AEST
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This poem obviosuly shows you have a special strength, Em. A stuggle over materialism in which you won the battle. Very nice write indeed. :-) A very successful "heart sweeping".
Thank you for sharing it and showing your courage.
Tim
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Re: Idol
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 01:55:57 AM AEST
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"as you die you too shall live,
as He can, yourself truly forgive"
"I tell you the truth, unless you eat the flesh of the Son of Man and drink his blood, you have no life in you." (John 6:53)
You have found the secret to life, my sister, and I am glad for you. Though giving up the world and every other desire but Him is painful, it is perhaps to small a price to pay for the worth of knowing his love. There is no fear in love, but perfect love drives out fear, for fear has to do with punishment. Dont forget that. Blessed are the pure in heart, for they will see God. Test your heart to see what your desires are, and turn them all on him. The pursuit of holiness is indestructable. When you have purified yourself (naturally, with his help every step of the way) from the lusts of this world, you will be a clean vessel, holy and useful to your Maker.
And this is the goal of our hope, that even as he has commanded, in all circumstances we might remain in him. This is how we show our love for God: by obeying his commandments. And his commandment is that we walk in love. Love does no harm to its neighbour, and they will know we are his disciples by our love. So, beloved, let us love one another...
May you always grow in the truth, and the knowledge of his love, counting the cost, (everything lost) as you press on into his kingdom. His love is extravagant.
Peace be with you.
Joshua
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Re: Idol
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by NDean on
Tuesday, 12th December 2006 @ 01:09:15 PM AEST
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Really good poem. Well done.
Oh, and thanks for posting on my Forum.
Nathan |
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