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Fading Away (All Alone)
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 05:20:12 PM in AEST
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As the tears trickle down my paralyzed face
There's no reason to smile
When sadness reigns supreme
And your love is in someone else's arms
My arms remain empty
Only filled with scars and memories
Hope hangs from singed threads
I fade away all alone
I wonder why all alone
I ask questions all alone
I am alone, all alone
Afraid of hurting and letting you inside
I am so weak, I realize
Wishing for oblivion
And to hold you in my arms forever
Wishes fall like rain
A depressing shower (I shelter amidst loneliness)
As they run into the gutter
I fade away all alone
I wonder why all alone
I ask questions all alone
I am alone, all alone
Time can heal torment,
But my heart never seems to heal
I hate my ***** selfishness
And I hate myself for these feelings
Fading away as these memories don't
A forgotten nightmare
A tragic mistake, a blip
Fading away unconsciously, but fading away
I fade away all alone
I wonder why all alone
I ask questions all alone
I am alone, all alone
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by glu1 on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 06:14:12 PM AEST
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| brilliant poem, so vivid and real. Excellent use of repetition |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by DesolantDreamer on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 06:42:17 PM AEST
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| good write. I can relate...but you are never alone. I am always there if anyone needs a shoulder. |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 10:37:46 PM AEST
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I am so weak, I realize
Wishing for oblivion
And to hold you in my arms forever
Wishes fall like rain
I love those lines, Joel. They just speak to me.
Also, nice use of the word, "blip" it struck me as odd that the word was used and even more odd when it fit. It really conveys the idea/message accurately. Bravo.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 12:04:02 AM AEST
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Another great write, Joel.... You have certainly grown in your writing style...
I look forward to greater work from you....
(You already know what this poem means to me).....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by SimplyMe on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 02:27:33 AM AEST
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Wonderul write. I enjoyed it.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 07:35:17 AM AEST
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Joel you'll never be alone sweetie.
This was so nicely writen the enotions you where pouring was outstanding. You really did grow into such an amazing poet that i will always admire for your sillines, your love, and your friendship.
Always,
Jane @)->--- |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by waos on
Sunday, 13th March 2005 @ 02:41:20 PM AEST
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This was so sad Joel, I see what you mean when you said reading
these poems would explain what's up better than you trying to just
say it. I hope this stuff all works out for you and your confusion eases.
I'll be praying for you.
~Waos/Kara |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by venkat on
Thursday, 17th March 2005 @ 01:20:23 AM AEST
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Hi Joel, you have listed out many of my qualities though I am not ready to fade away..
You never fail to impress me friend..:-) venkat |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 11:43:50 PM AEST
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| amazing poem joel. really touching and speaks volumes. thats one of the best beginnings ive seen in a while. remember repetition is a good thing, but too much, is a bad thing. |
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Re: Fading Away (All Alone)
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 03:15:39 PM AEST
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| wow, this poem took a hard tug at my heartstrings. I loved it. beautful wording. How tragic. I hope your scars heal as best they can. |
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