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Love?Or is it Really?You'll Neva know!
Contributed by
SunRaise
on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 05:04:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Love use to scare me,but now I have no fears,my tears use to fall down.BUT now you're here. I was afraid to love afraid to share a life with someone else, but now I know I don't want to be by myself......No longer afraid to look in your eyes cause now I realize that love isn't something to be afraid of and baby now I thank the Lord above for sending an angel to me and now we can finally be .....but We was as one for a moment at time but now you don't want to be mine, why?As I sit and sigh I ain't going to cry no and I'm not going to stand in your way but when you say I Love you....the feeling is so fine......and I know you will be back boy....only a matter of time
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Re: Love?Or is it Really?You'll Neva know!
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 05:09:24 AM AEST
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This was good, i liked it. Just needs a pattern or a flow to it.
Jane |
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Re: Love?Or is it Really?You'll Neva know!
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 07:46:18 AM AEST
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The poem in itself is good, but I agree with Jane, some kind of like breaks would be helpful and make it easier to read.
Also shortened letters yould be turned to full words to make it more, I don't know...poetic?
Still, great write, the words are good.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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