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Before and After
Contributed by
calista
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Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:13:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Before and After
September 16, 2004
Nobody shot or stabbed
Nobody notices nothing special
Nobody's watching
Then there's this popping noise
Everybody stands there staring
Staring like they'd never seen anything so terrible
Nobody knows what has happened for sure
A crowd's gathering, excitement in the air
The ambulance is tearing along the street
Nothing there but pain, pain throbbing and pounding
Don't let me die
But they don't let him go
Back in the park
He isn't real, or isn't the same person
He doesn't feel like he's ever felt before
He's waiting for the second shot to finish him off
He hides how he feels
Nobody's going to remember it long
Speculate who fired the shot, whose car it was
What do you know?
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calista
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2005-03-12 00:13:35] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Before and After
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:18:11 AM AEST (User
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this is an interesting poem. it's really well written and i love how you leave it open at the end for the reader. It's just a nifty idea. Nice job. |
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Re: Before and After
(User Rating: 1 ) by inoc on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 04:34:17 AM AEST (User
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Thanks for finding this and submitting it!
Written well....
Hope this doesn't happen to anyone again but top write. |
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Re: Before and After
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 08:11:26 AM AEST (User
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*wonders*
I love and hate poems like this all at the same time, I always wonder...
Great write though,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Before and After
(User Rating: 1 ) by law_glen18 on
Saturday, 10th November 2007 @ 06:46:16 PM AEST (User
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Loved it. Keeping with a fantastically written theme, you compiled this write very well.
All the best!!! |
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