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The way I see you
Contributed by
Nardo
on
Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 09:13:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Your sweetness is sickening to me
knowing it's not your native tongue.
Nasty drool gathers between the gaps in your teeth
a nauseating stench
from the festering facade
that falls from your lips.
Your endearments make me shudder,
shudder to think that you think
this is real
real enough to be you.
But soon enough
the rain will fall
in the wrong direction
and I will wake to find the
air still and thick,
thick with your gathering anger
trapped
and
harnessed in a corral.
Kicking and fighting
with hooves of aggression.
Copyright ©
Nardo
... [
2005-03-11 21:13:05] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The way I see you
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jane_Doe on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:09:13 AM AEST (User
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Very wise. It reminds me of someone I know.
Great imagery.
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Re: The way I see you
(User Rating: 1 ) by Whisper on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:47:32 PM AEST (User
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Wow thats heavy . The words chosen actuallly made the write fierce. Impacting the reader with a thought of what could have made some one /thing so bitter. Hard words . I think whatever anger was boiling this day was released in this write. Good write.
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Re: The way I see you
(User Rating: 1 ) by Whisper on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:48:00 PM AEST (User
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Wow thats heavy . The words chosen actuallly made the write fierce. Impacting the reader with a thought of what could have made some one /thing so bitter. Hard words . I think whatever anger was boiling this day was released in this write. Good write.
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Re: The way I see you
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 05:51:57 PM AEST (User
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Very good. Much emotion felt here. Peace to you. |
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Re: The way I see you
(User Rating: 1 ) by helianthus on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 11:25:55 PM AEST (User
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I shuddered when I read this. It is so full of power. Excellent! Thank you. L |
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