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Pain in his Eyes
Contributed by
JBH
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Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 01:01:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Tears fall through the mist
As I wipe the stain from my eye
An empty dream shattered
The light left to die
Sins of a heathen
Lies of a hollow soul
Shallow cares and heartless fears
With no one left to mute the screams
A weary body lies down
As if to give the spirit away
Lost to eternity and fear
And the realization he will never be whole
Ashes and fire
Dust and stone
A broken man with darkening eyes
Lies broken forever, with hope never to be known
Let me go
Don’t believe I’m here to stay
I’m not the man you think
Do not wish to pray
This chapter will end
And another will start
The pages filled with words
But nothing can be seen in the gathering dark
Stars and Heaven
Sun and Sky
Light fading on the horizon
A tear forever left to cry.
Copyright ©
JBH
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2005-03-10 01:01:39]
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Re: Pain in his Eyes
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 01:14:39 AM AEST
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I might have to agree with you, this is dark poetry at its finest.
It is raw yet subtle, with radiant imagery, as well as absent of cliché dark themes.
“Sins of a heathen
Lies of a hollow soul
Shallow cares and heartless fears
With no one left to mute the screams”
-The atheist within me, can very much relate to this.
I am a little speechless, in regards to your talents, this poem was eloquent and mesmerising.
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Re: Pain in his Eyes
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by mina-1 on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 05:22:12 AM AEST
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I don't usually read dark poetry, but I'm glad I came across your poem.
This is an absolutely great piece of work.
Keep it up. Well done |
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Re: Pain in his Eyes
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 06:22:57 AM AEST
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Spontaneous, I guess. Not the finest dark poem I've ever read, but that's a matter of opinion, no? I guess it could also be construed as suicide poetry, in some fashion . . . but I don't know.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Pain in his Eyes
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by JBH on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 11:25:43 AM AEST
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| thx for all the nice comments guys, i guess i should have emphasized my sarcasim more in my comments because i really didnt like the way this peom felt after writing it. |
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