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Farewelling the Child
Contributed by
spike
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Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 05:11:55 AM in AEST
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The house is too big without you,
The long corridors echoing with footfalls
The silence, heavy and oppressive,
As I take the slow pulse of the walls
- Gone
Your room is like an empty shell,
The chick has pecked free and fled the nest
The emptiness ripples like a stone in a well,
The thump, thump, thumping in the hollow breast
- Away
No more your raucous tones cutting the air,
The detritus of your life trailing like a comet’s tail
So many things you did drove me to despair,
Relationships can seem so frail
- For now.
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spike
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2005-03-08 05:11:55]
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Re: Farewelling the Child
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 05:40:30 AM AEST
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I remember when my fisrt one left the nest, my oldest daughter, it was horrible.
The only thing I could do was try to focus on the good side of it like, It want be as much laundry. Never could get passed that one.
good write.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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Re: Farewelling the Child
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by Rhymingron on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 06:45:09 AM AEST
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| A good one. |
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Re: Farewelling the Child
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 06:53:41 AM AEST
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Nicely done. Seee I keep telling my mum that she'd miss me if I left home, me being the youngest of eight, but she doesn't believe me. *grins* I like this one, deep, expressive and insightful, thanks for sharing.
Take Care
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Re: Farewelling the Child
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 09:05:19 PM AEST
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It'll be years before I know the enormity of this. But the thump, thump, thumping... tells me it's a lot bigger than the words on the page. *sigh*
Knowing not how one let's go of the comet's tail,
~SNM~
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Re: Farewelling the Child
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 12:49:34 PM AEST
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| Well, you got the feeling right down to the last teardrop. That is the most empty feeling I have ever felt. I didn't realize how much of my life was tied up with theirs. I really can't believe how well you captured it. Dove |
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