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Of Pins and Sleepy Feelings
Contributed by
PsychoScissors
on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 08:13:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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You gave me one due warning then
but I just held my merry tune
thrown into the sky I died
with needles in my eyes
Like the stars you took away
and left a gaping hole replaced
by pins and needles and sleepy feelings
that just seemed all the same...
I rubbed my face into your neck
Said 'lest I dye before sunrise
You'll be here when I wake?'
But so much like others then
you just looked down and shook my hand
and went away again...
Blinded by your light I cried
'let me come along behind!'
But to my sullen siren song
I heeded no reply...
Copyright ©
PsychoScissors
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2005-03-07 20:13:36]
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Re: Of Pins and Sleepy Feelings
(User Rating: 1 )
by waos on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 09:17:15 PM AEST
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That was really cool, very interesting and different. Nice job, I liked it a lot.
I really liked the third stanza, I think it was my favorite, you also ended
it very effectively. Awesome work.
~Waos/Kara |
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Re: Of Pins and Sleepy Feelings
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by KantKureLyfe on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 03:46:30 PM AEST
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| Any person that has ever been in love could relate to this beautiful piece of writting. I for one. We never really know what we have till its gone ... sad isn't it. Ellis .. |
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