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Pain and Memories
Contributed by
lostlove
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Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 02:03:25 AM in AEST
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So much anger
So much pain
So much torment
Too much fear
Give in to the anger
The pain, torment, and fear
The feelings of hate
Feelings of lose
All that is left is torture
Torture of the soul
And all that remains
Is the memories
Memories of you
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lostlove
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2005-03-07 02:03:25]
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Re: Pain and Memories
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by veenu on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 06:33:55 AM AEST
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lostlove u need modifications try more
good poem
but if u realy love him or her than make it more emotional so that we know that u really love him or her |
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Re: Pain and Memories
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 11:21:16 PM AEST
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Hey there :)
Well, i like the brevity of this poem, and the almost abrupt ending to it..
But I'd suggest one thing: maybe just try making it a lil deeper, adding more depth and meaning.
Oh, and also -- I like some of the repetition.
Keep writing!
~kt |
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