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The Passing
Contributed by
MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa
on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 10:53:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I stand beside a stranger
Of which I wish I knew
Because ever since I lost myself
this cold, dark world seems so strange to me
I know not where I've been now
Memories slowly fade
For this darkness lingers, tearing them away
this darkness has overtaken, much more than I could overcome
So here I stand, alone and cold
For have I lost the only reassuarance that i hold?
There is a single message
A lingering decite
and within my worst enemy, I've worked to my defeat
See nor touch, may not be done
Darkness, reaching blindly for my simple holding on
my only world is slowly caving in
Defending itself from a war, that never ends
My soul slowly awakens, one more battle lost
Darkness thriving on my loss
I lie alone and waiting
Darkness to overcome
As my timid soul awaits before me, so strange, so cold, so lost
I watch it as it wonders through a piintless, endless waltz
I may never help it, simply watch it search
Seeking things in impossible ways, things it will never find, for darkness shall catch me first
Slowly now I've lain me down
Tired and afar
As darkness takes my soul away
I'll simply sit and watch
For I may never save it, it gave itself away
Although I understand this not, I wish for a warming hand
And even though I know that all is gone....
It guess it has been over
For quite a while now
Now, i've sat and thought this over
So many, many times
dreaming in a nightmare, one that never ends
I can't awaken what is not resting, can't fight what cant be seen
But even as I watch this now
I know what I have lost
as darkness settles closer
choices I'll regret
so many have become so lost
and simply given up
but to do this I simply cannot proceed
a chance at better luck
a dwindling hope i know i cant hold to forever longer
wont this just give up?
And as I rise slwoly to my aching feet
I turn to walk away
and this darkness closely follows
I've realized my wrong
Darkness humming sadness, drifting through my fears
I attempt to blur it out, just one last time
ignore this calling voice
but whispering softly, call my name
I'll make my final choice
My time at last has come now
This darkness has won this war
And now i lay me down to rest, Darkness thriving on my last breath
As I lay me down to death.
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MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa
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2005-03-06 22:53:36]
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Re: The Passing
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by xtremcalibur on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 11:02:58 PM AEST
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| Ok, here's the deal. I realize that you wrote this several years ago. Back on it; shorten it a bit. Put some thought into it and please; it's devoid of passion, which it was meant to be. It is good and a lot of good things in it. Just when I was about to stop reading it, a good thing popped up. So try redoing this and it could have the potential of being a masterpiece. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: The Passing
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 11:15:54 PM AEST
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| calibur is fulla *****. even if this was a horrible poem, which it's not, you should never ever "redo" any of your work. In censoring yourself you become a target for mediocrity. never change anytning you write. if you wanted it be different you woulda wrote it that way to begin with. keep up the good work and screw these other jerkoffs |
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