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Smiles all the while
Contributed by
bttrflynajar
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Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 02:40:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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my soul is breaking down
destruction without a sound
my body is numb it seems
yet my face still happily gleems
my heart is breaking, my body aching
sick and tired of all this faking
no im not alright
tired of losing this fight
especially when my favorite time becomes the night
so i can crawl into my empty bed
sleepings as close as i can get to dead.
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2005-03-06 02:40:30]
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Re: Smiles all the while
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by xtremcalibur on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 02:50:26 AM AEST
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| Quite interesting. But I hear yah. You and I have something in common. Your favorite time is the night ~ mine is the day. While people sleep I think of the dead. When they awake ~ I am with peace mentally knowing I won't fear the dead. I know the demons of the soul. Take care of yourself and don't wrap yourself up too seriously in this prose. Good write. |
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Re: Smiles all the while
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 03:32:17 AM AEST
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| This is a wonderful poem. I really like the last two lines. Nice work. I enjoyed it. |
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Re: Smiles all the while
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 05:34:39 AM AEST
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An interesting poem, but it could use a little snip here and there.
It's just my opinion though and please don't mind me if you know this makes sense to you.
Anyways i liked this its sad and deep a great poem.
Jane ^_^ |
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