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Alone and Alienated
Contributed by
WorthlesSanity666
on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 07:57:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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No one seems to understand,
no one seems to care.
No one seems to love me,
no one seems to dare.
Why do they think I’m fun to torture?
Why do they make fun?
I don’t want to there to be a future.
Why do they forget me?
Why do they always target me?
When will I be free of this insanity?
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2005-03-05 19:57:15] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Alone and Alienated
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:47:32 PM AEST (User
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good poem all in all, but redundancy and the questioning nature of it really lessened the meanings of the verses. the rhyme scheme needs works. substance was lacking in this piece with all of the questions, and maybe answering the questions or going in depth of why you think those questions could make this better. |
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