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Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 03:39:12 AM in AEST
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I'm doing nothing more
Than amplifying silence now
Turning clouds into water drops
And rainbows into arced lines
Scrawled haplessly in pencil
On beige carpet fibers
I've turned the volume down
And the leftover nothingness up
Because no one needs to hear
Their national anthem sung
Off key, weakly, from inside
A brown paper bag
And I'll begin with chapter three
Even if the first is incomplete
And the second nonexistent
Because it's really all I can do
Since the once white glue
Is graying as it dries
And if someone, oh so matter of factly
Asks me to describe red
Just because
It seemed like the thing to do at the time
I'll tell them
As boldly as I might possibly know how
That I haven't the foggiest idea
What red looks like
And then -
I'll stare at them blankly
Not knowing what else to do
But wishing... that I did.
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by classicfailedhero on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 04:23:41 AM AEST
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| i'm in envy, you write exactly how i want to write, your poem was so full of imagery both clear and surreal. i realy liked this poem. |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by venkat on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 06:10:14 AM AEST
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| How nice to read such beautiful lines" if some one ...asks me to describe red..I have not the foggiest idea what red looks like."..ha..ha..quite refreshing.:-) venkat |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by freckle on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 10:28:00 AM AEST
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Oh that was great! I love writes like this when you know that creativity was just flowing freely. Wonderful read!
Carol |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 11:39:53 AM AEST
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Beautiful! Gorgeous even. You've gone and left me lagging behind in awe once more. Creative, expressive and simply wonderful. Another masterpiece.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 04:08:25 PM AEST
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Seems we understand each other even better than I had thought. The time comes for each of us. Growth is such a mysterious thing until you look back and see that you have done it without really having tried at all.
Stitch |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Sunday, 6th March 2005 @ 05:49:06 PM AEST
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| Awsome write! I wish more poems were as creative as this one. I agree, I liked the imagery. Quite nice! Eevry time I try to write any thing like this it turns out like crap. Yours, however is the COMPLETE opposite. Kuddos! |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 04:56:05 PM AEST
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I heard a song this weekend I had not heard in years ... Eric Carmen's "Make Me Lose Control" ... You just brought that memory back.
"...Turn the radio up for that sweet sound
Hold me close, never let me go
Keep this feelin' alive, make me lose control..."
I say sing that anthem ... proud, and loud, and strong ... and let the off keyed resonance drive you from the confines of the paperbag.
Worry not of re(a)d ... nor the inabillity to portray it's description ... the color is that of passion, it is rumored ... describe that, passion, for surely it will suffice and render a more poetic image.
A beautiful write Snemmy that I have sullied with my words ...
Nazzy ~
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th March 2005 @ 08:56:37 AM AEST
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Umm. I don't know - I found this oddly comedic. I think I may have imagined myself doing all the things you portray here - and the notion just makes me laugh. It might well be different for you, of course, but that's what I got out of it.
My tuppence,
N_F |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 02:20:03 PM AEST
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Damn girl, I know you probably won't agree with me, but I think this is one of your best.
I can relate tothe first verse the most, as I have found myself the same way, before.
Thankyou for making me thing, once again.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by wizard on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 11:47:13 AM AEST
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i enjoyed reading this. life would be so much easier is we only knew what to do next.
wiz |
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Re: Chapter 3 - Will Not Be Re(a)d
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 11:27:05 PM AEST
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This is all, um, dream like. I guess because it kinda reminds me of a dream Like dreams sometimes do, coming right in the middle of something and suddenly ending up somewhere else. Then a message that we're not quite sure what to make of it.
Wonderful metaphors and perfectly penned.
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