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On the Exhale
Contributed by
Merry
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Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 09:19:03 PM in AEST
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Involuntary nervous tick pulsed
Brink of death felt close
Breath exhaled one last time
It was just as she imagined it would be
Everything came true here in this moment
Flashed across her movie-screen mind
She remembered her prayers
She remembered her third grade teacher
It all came rushing back to her
As death crushed her beneath its rusty heel
Light swallowed up the darkness
Until there was nothing to be afraid of
She was delighted to be here at last
Copyright ©
Merry
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2005-03-04 21:19:03]
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Re: On the Exhale
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 09:05:32 AM AEST
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This is... wow. Beautiful, gorgeous, stunning... those words seem so trivial. Its masterful, excellent, powerful, heart-wrenching and somehow leaves one feeling hopeful as well, I'm not making much sense I know, but thats your fault. Truly beautiful.
Take care
Hugs 'n Love
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Re: On the Exhale
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 04:04:58 PM AEST
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Exactly how I imagine it and stated with perfect finesse as always.
Stitch |
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Re: On the Exhale
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 07:51:42 PM AEST
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strong write, gaille, deeply moving..... hugs n' love nessa
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