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Crystaline Suicide
Contributed by
suicidebringshappiness
on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 07:42:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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These crystaline dreams,
Lifes not the way it seems,
There were time where,
You said you'd be there,
And now I look and you're nowhere,
You're off somewhere,
If only you realized the pain you cause,
For all this theres not enough gause,
To stop the bleeding,
A razors edge,
Buried deep within my flesh,
My dreams are meshed,
Nothings the way it should be,
Now you sit,
Forced to watch me bleed,
A pool on the floor,
A buried seed,
Now you drowning in tears,
Of the ***** up mess you've made,
But guess what,
Im not coming back.
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2005-03-03 19:42:38]
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Re: Crystaline Suicide
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 08:01:30 PM AEST
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very sad poem I can relate to this a lot. I hope
you write out how u feel instead of actually
carrying out your thoughts. Keep up the
writing and remember that happier days are
always ahead.
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Re: Crystaline Suicide
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by Elayner27 on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 10:16:55 PM AEST
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| This is a very deep write. I love it. It has rhyme, it tells an excellent story. Also puts everything in a great perspective. |
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Re: Crystaline Suicide
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by PoeticLicense on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 07:17:47 PM AEST
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| Interesting. not a bad job, though I don't like poems of this type. Maybe try writing when you are in a good mood too? |
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