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Garden of my mind
Contributed by
Jeff_Scott_Morehead
on
Sunday, 21st July 2002 @ 09:29:18 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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I heard our car pull in the driveway,
I heard your footsteps on the stairs.
You took my hand across the table,
As we bowed our heads in prayer.
Today we sat out on the porch swing,
Enjoyed the cool and gentle breeze.
As we glazed at yonder hillside,
Viewing brightly colored leaves.
For some time we talked together,
Of the things we both hold dear.
Of Kids and Grand Kids living around us,
As we did in bygone years.
All day we walked and talked and laughed,
As in another day and time.
And each day we'll be together,
In the garden of my mind.
Copyright ©
Jeff_Scott_Morehead
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Jackee_line on
Monday, 25th November 2002 @ 09:59:56 AM AEST
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beautifully well written. i enjoy your poetry so much, they are to me written from the heart and seem so real.
I just don't understand that with 498 readings...not one comment.
An excellent write |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by kevinTHEpreoccupied on
Wednesday, 27th November 2002 @ 11:59:30 AM AEST
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| it seemed more of a happy poem to me than a grief and tragic one... but it is good i liked it |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th January 2003 @ 06:52:59 PM AEST
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| That was very good! It made me think of old memories and how i always look back at them. . thanks!! |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Olddarkme on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 07:36:49 PM AEST
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| Wonderful idea. I'm guessing it's a story of a man who lost his spouse but keeps her with him each day through his memories. It actually made me feel a little emotional and I love it when a poem makes me feel that way. Some of the structure of the poem could be a little more fluid but it actually adds to the poem's innocence. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Arwen on
Saturday, 18th January 2003 @ 01:11:53 AM AEST
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*wow* this poem was an absolutely beautiful piece to read. it took me back to happy childhood memories. It shows that memories are strong and everylasting, even more precious when u're alone. people come and go but its the time you spend with them...the precious memories you create together...that lasts a lifetime, sometimes eternally. *grin* provided u're prepared to preserve them thro' poetry, art or song.
The words, though simple...brought amazing imagery to mind. I didn't exactly see it in that fatalistic, dark tragedy sort of thing u meant to see, it was sad, moving and yet also filled with hope somehow. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by JamesHowlett on
Thursday, 1st May 2003 @ 10:54:17 AM AEST
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| It's a great poem. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it with us! |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 11:05:00 PM AEST
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incredible write, so well done and moving
Shari |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by kieran on
Saturday, 24th January 2004 @ 02:13:06 PM AEST
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| i'm not sure how to interpretate this poem, because on the surface of the issue it seems like it's a very happy poem, but as you get to the last line, could it be about unrequited love. The kind of love where you are always together in your mind, but never in actuality? whatever. Great poem, though I think you could have done without the 'yonder' - 'the far' might work as well, structurally at least. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 6th February 2004 @ 01:33:00 AM AEST
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dearest jeff, i cant believe i never commented on this one lol, i have read it over and over every so often, its one of my favorites of yours, and everyone elses too hehe, really though, it is the most beautifully written poem on loss i have ever read:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by eternal_sorrows on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 12:29:34 AM AEST
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| Very precious poem. My heart to yours as I wish you a gentle healing. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by ammalu on
Wednesday, 23rd June 2004 @ 03:39:33 AM AEST
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| great feelings- touching too-thanks for the good write. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by RavenShadows on
Tuesday, 20th July 2004 @ 06:19:29 PM AEST
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| I can understand, with the recent loss of my sister, birth mother, and father I know that when I miss them the most, they will always be in the garden of my mind. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Starlilly on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 06:47:40 AM AEST
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Absoultely beautiful ~
Reminds me of days with my daddy ~ |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by momentoftruth on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 05:11:02 PM AEST
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| Very well-written. I like this one a lot. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by XOashleyreneXO on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 08:38:43 PM AEST
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| short...sweet...and to the point. love it. it is a very beautiful piece and i enjoyed reading it so much. this really put an image in my mind. thank you for sharing this with the world. i'm sure it'll touch many people as it has touched me. love to you always...ashley rene' |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Sensei on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 01:19:43 PM AEST
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I wasn't sure where this was going until the final line, at which point the hairs stood up on the back of my neck. I see very few poems that I like or enjoy. Yours is certainly one - an excellent and moving piece - and the message so subtly given.
Thank you |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by graci on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 05:22:06 AM AEST
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wow!
what a poem
love it! |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by inoc on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 06:32:58 AM AEST
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Oh your write is tremendous!
I loved the ending it just is like a gold border around a beautiful picture...
I would hang it in the enterence of my hallway for all to see...
cheers!~ |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th September 2005 @ 07:40:44 AM AEST
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| Superb write. The twist at the end was very clever. Really touching write. Chris. |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by candysears on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 08:21:02 PM AEST
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Brilliant, keeping everyone mind on a wonder.
Very good.
God Bless |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by slogan on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 02:06:30 PM AEST
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| great write..jh |
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Re: Garden of my mind
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by CaddishCut on
Friday, 11th August 2006 @ 03:36:00 AM AEST
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| This one was so cute and sweet. Good work! |
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