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Broken
Contributed by
MyChemicalRomanceHeLeNa
on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 11:07:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I'll spread my broken wings one last time in memory
Of those I've known to die in vain
Only wanting ecstasy to laiden them with light
a sight to see, a memory so dark of blood-stained pictures of faded beliefs
To hold to a faith set to betray is nothing new to those closest to life...
And understanding..In life.. For those it converses with the most
Wipe away the tears of tragic endings
I remember you, and the you used to be
To see you one last time
An endless moment in a countless time
To hold steady to a fragile soul, discussing secrets long untold
A loosing grip, an endless war of pains and stricken souls to fall
Never rise to tell me all those lies of which I never understood
I can't hear nor see the light that lies ahead this mellow path so bathed in blood
I'm guilty of my wounds, destraut about the lasting night
and wondering what happiness is..Isn't what I've dreamed of..
So lie yourself into the rest of unsteady souls
Awaiting death from heartbreak, loosing love and holding to a scalding wrath of insights of this tragic life
Shaken forever
Shaking in my arms
Drifting to the floor
bleeding incisions of lonely decision..
dieing not alone
but dieing with the only one worth dieing for
a dream of spiteful minds worth a cold heart
And sleep forever in one anothers Blood-stained hearts..
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2005-03-01 23:07:24]
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Re: Broken
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 12:04:04 AM AEST
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so sad but very well said.
I know it had to be very hard on u.
keep the faith and keep writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Broken
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by SimplyMe on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 12:17:10 AM AEST
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Oh wow..... this was very touching. I couldn't even begin to imagine your pain and sorrow. Your emotions show well through this poem. I enjoyed it though it nearly brought me to tears. I ulmost lost my sister to suicide once. I called the Ambulance just in time. I wish you could have been your friends hero. I'm truely sorry for your loss. Stay strong. Your both in my prayers.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Broken
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by tin on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 12:18:26 AM AEST
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| I'm sorry for your loss, i also lost a friend to suicide recently(i wrote three poems in his memory so far, ode to gavin yock, a painfull state of mind, and weeping whiskey tears). i know that sometimes it helps to talk to people who can relate, so pm me if you'd like to talk about it. |
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Re: Broken
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 01:15:13 AM AEST
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“I'll spread my broken wings one last time in memory
Of those I've known to die in vain”
You have recycled the concept of ‘broken wings’ and offered new meaning.
As challenging as this seems, you have broken the cycle and defeated thoughtlessness.
This piece is as complex, as death itself.
As mortals, we fear our lives, thus death, yet you seem to have accepted it.
“Only wanting ecstasy to laden them with light”
A beautiful use of imagery, here.
“To hold to a faith, set to betray, is nothing new to those closest to life...”
This must certainly be your most powerful observation or perhaps even philosophy on the analogy of life.
I must agree with you, only entirely, as any thing one may believe, will inevitably ‘betray’, hence my atheism.
“And understanding...In life… For those, it converses with the most”
I am in awe of your personification of life.
You utilise figurative language passionately and constructively.
“Wipe away the tears of tragic endings”
You can never go wrong with a pun. This is as creative and original as your entire piece.
“An endless moment in a countless time”
How ambiguous of you, this line demonstrates a weighty intelligence, well executed!
“To hold steady to a fragile soul, discussing secrets long untold”
Life is indeed fragile, physically, one may die at any opportunity, yet to have a fragile soul allows for a weaker life.
“and wondering what happiness is..Isn't what I've dreamed of…”
Life is much of an illusion. Things do not always appear as they seem!
“So lie yourself into the rest of unsteady souls”
An incredible interpretation of purgatory.
You are very talented.
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