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She's Dying
Contributed by
lonely-nobody
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Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 09:11:10 PM in AEST
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Roses bleeding on the ground
Symbol of love that'll never be found
Wilted and dying
Crying tears of blood
She's coming undone
A broken heart, battered and torn
It's soul lost among the pain
Shredding with time
It's fighting for her life
A shattered star in the sky
She's giving it all she's got not to cry
Kneeling down to pick up the pieces
She's losing control of her emotions
A drowning doll in the sea
She's finding it hard to breathe
Choking on the water of death
She's unwillingly taking her last breath
Plunging to the bottom forever
There's no more traces of her left
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lonely-nobody
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2005-03-01 21:11:10]
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Re: She's Dying
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 09:20:09 PM AEST
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so sad but very well said.
We all have to die to find ourselves or should I say the real meanings in life..
huggs,
emy |
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Re: She's Dying
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by ForeverAlone on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 09:20:18 PM AEST
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Very well done....Great job
Very surreal...
Clark |
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Re: She's Dying
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by SimplyMe on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 10:19:03 PM AEST
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I loved this poem. I could actually visualize this. Well done.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: She's Dying
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 10:20:12 PM AEST
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| I liked the imagery in your poem. Sad and beautiful together. Keep sharing. |
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Re: She's Dying
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 06:25:44 AM AEST
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I think the first stanza stood out from the rest of the poem.
It was powerfull and the message was strong.
I liked it a lot.
Keep writing and posting.
Jane ^_^ |
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Re: She's Dying
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by Munchkin on
Thursday, 26th October 2006 @ 03:44:04 PM AEST
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| thats beautiful. if the girl acutally dying or is she dying emotionally? becoming insecure and trying to fix a wounded heart? |
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