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HERE... TONIGHT
Contributed by
Stitch
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Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 07:32:26 PM in AEST
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I came here tonight to see
if the sickness had lifted
It had not
All of you there
strung out in lines
parading your misery
like ulcers
I watched as more unfolded
passionate trysts
knotted in garish lyrics
---a flag of anthems
stained with the deep red of dried-blood,
but rolling ever forward ...
or backward
Either way, I couldn't stay
my eyes have witnessed the gruesome,
and they no longer care to behold
even in shadow,
the words of this harsh light too glaring
I came here tonight
to see if the disease had abated,
but it has not
Copyright ©
Stitch
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 07:37:48 PM AEST
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Wow! This is amazing. Really strong poem. I love it.
Carol |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by the_mouse_that_roared on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 08:50:39 PM AEST
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That is some powerful writing. I sense both anger and that " I've had all I can stand "
feeling. Very impressive |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by LadyWynter on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 08:54:33 PM AEST
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These are such strong words, full of emotion, and very powerful. Really an excellent write. Good job.
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 09:30:53 PM AEST
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Sad but very well said.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by mina-1 on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 09:40:24 PM AEST
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| A very strong and powerful piece of work you've produced here Stitch. I can sense anger and can't stand it anymore amongst ur poem. A great write. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Les4567 on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 10:28:38 PM AEST
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Your words are very powerful and inquistive. You are a very good writer. You never disappoint me. Everytime I read one of your poems I think WOW! I always enjoy your poems and cant wait to read more. Keep up the good work
~Leslie
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 01:38:09 PM AEST
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I think this is one of your best sweetie, and it is better written than many poems I have seen.
I agree with Jarred, this is very atmospheric, but also rather sad.
Stunning write my friend,
I wish I could say more.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 05:15:23 PM AEST
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This was depressingly real to me. Have I ever suffered an epiphany - so interestingly phrased.
This was a strong poem, even in its apparent dismay.
Thanks, Stitch, for sharing. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by tx_graffiti_gal on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 03:43:44 PM AEST
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| You have a very creative mind. You use words that describe so well. I need that dictionary lol. You paint a picture with words did you know that. You always have me thinking. I sometimes sit and read over and over till I understand it and then I respond. Your work deserves much more then a website. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by bernard on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 09:38:37 AM AEST
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Stitch you write a very vivid description of all the ills in this world. Just these words make the poem so effective.
I came here tonight
to see if the disease had abated,
but it has not
Great write top marks from bernard. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th March 2005 @ 02:27:29 PM AEST
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| As disapointing as you've made this piece sound, I for one am never disapointed when I come here to read your works. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Kie on
Thursday, 10th March 2005 @ 09:13:37 AM AEST
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Very powerful Stitch.
Your honesty is refreshing.
Kie |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:26:10 AM AEST
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Ohh this was just nicely writen Stitchy. It's emotive, yet you wrote this so well obviously.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by arden on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 09:45:42 AM AEST
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this is deep stitchy, and powerful.
usually there's not alot i can say when commenting on your work, cuz you honestly leave me speechless.
i loved this poem. the words were moving and strong.
amazing work, as always.
max points.
Arden |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 07:43:39 PM AEST
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A powerful poem, with graphic imagery and emotion. You have a wonderful style.
I truely admire your talent, you are truely a poet. Part of me wishes I could write like that.
Great piece
Willofree |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 01:45:17 PM AEST
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Wonderful expression. I love the italicized closing lines.
Andrew |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Red_October on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 05:42:14 PM AEST
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| THAT is an amazing poem. Tiffany J. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 09:28:38 PM AEST
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*notes the date at the top of the page*
I remember the first time I read this... and I remember finding it impossible to comment. I still... don't quite know what to say. Looking entirely beyond the "here"... I find this... positive, strong, forward looking, and... sad (for the poet in me cannot help but struggle a bit at the thought of an empty page, you know?).
On the upside, Stitchy... I have you (in my mind's eye) riding off with the tires squealing and the pedal to the floor. *smiles* And I know... that should you ever want/need to take a break and stop for dinner - that I can be there (and would - without hesitation) within short order. Just remind me, next time, to order a side of coffee with my wine *wink*.
Wishing you all the wonderful things that you deserve and sending along hugs for the entire family,
~Snem~
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by SocialMisfit on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 09:49:56 PM AEST
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| this is indeed a very powerfull write. i love the imagry that you gave us in this, again brovo, encore encore!!! :D |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 11:37:40 AM AEST
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I can't tell you how many times I've been here. I can't count the number of times I have read and reviewed these words. I can see their application in many aspects of life ... and even here ... this site, these people that we know and have come to call friends. Some fight depression, some fight the desire to self mutilate, some fight with each other, while others still, sing vulgar songs of wanting what can't be had. It puts perspective into the eclectic nature of those driven by words. The disease ... poetry ... voices ... insanity .... a thirst for knowledge ... a hunger for passion ... Like the disease of alcohol addiction, it can not be cured, managed perhaps ... but it will always be a part of the individual ... waiting ... just below the surface, for the time to speak out again.
I appreciate what has been said here Stitch. I hope the peace found, remains with you always. The need abated. Funny how the desire hangs around sometimes though ... if the need returns ... you will know where to find us ... hidden here within the words ... feeding our addiction.
God bless you my friend.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 01:59:32 PM AEST
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I've felt this... I didn't realize it until I read your poem, but... that's what it was... it must've been. Wow.
Beautiful, perfect words. The true art of poetry.
Love and peace,
Chelsea
(who misses Stitch, the first ever to reach out to her on YPDC) |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 06:22:39 PM AEST
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Some write in order to remove pain
Some write fantasy, for things that may never happen
Some write suicide notes in a poem
Some write, a simple Britch session turned into a poem
Some write for fun
Some write to discover something in themselves
Some write in order to find a meaning in their lives
Some write in order to grasp onto the meaning they find in themselves
Some write about events
Some write about love
Some write simple (me)
Some write to send out a message through teaching
Some write to reaveal a secret
Some write because they want to be discovered as a poet
Some write to leave something in the world when they move on to heaven.
Yes, I have. I take my time in reading poems, looking for deeper meanings.
Some people read fast
Some people read slow
Some want the words to be right in front of them
Some, like me, look for the hidden deeper meanings in the message written.. the Poem
Suffering an epiphany as I speak lol.
Very nice illuminating write my friend. Intellectual that is.
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Archie on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 06:32:50 PM AEST
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| Great poem. You have a very emotive and thought provoking piece. |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by midian on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 08:14:00 AM AEST
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| i think this poem was wonderfull thankyou for the inspiration it has brought to me |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by Putteragain on
Wednesday, 28th March 2007 @ 11:54:44 AM AEST
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i too have gone there
as always stitch |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 4th September 2020 @ 10:19:26 PM AEST
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| Powerful.... |
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Re: HERE... TONIGHT
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by JamesStockdale on
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| Powerful.... |
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 4th September 2020 @ 10:19:28 PM AEST
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| Powerful.... |
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