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Hear My Tears
Contributed by
concrete_rose
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Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 09:19:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The constant pain from my damaged heart, screams out for help, hurt by the things you say and do, without any feeling of guilt or shame, or atleast thats the way you make it seem, i reach out for you in my time of need, but you're selfishness cuts like knives and your character continues to decieve.
Lover can you hear my tears?
You burn me with your many lies, honesty in your heart is nowhere to be found, you hide the truth under those beautiful eyes, they seem so gentle, filled with mocha brown, when you smile you lift me up, when you frown you throw me down.
Lover can you feel my tears?
Your precious lips speak words, that my ears beg to hear, your voice sometimes controls me, it trembles me with fear, whatever your lips may say, is what my body may do, beacuse of that your words are slick and smooth.
Lover can you heal my tears?
your jealousy can be the worst at times, your jealously has a mind of it's own, it advances your insecurity, brings out your immaturity. It accuses me of being with others, although i feel alone, my lost heart is without warmth and shelter, and no place to call its home.
Lover can you wipe my tears?
You deeply cut that zig zag line down my shattered, battered, heart because your love is what i'm missin, you do not hear the tears i cry because you do not listen.
We can continue growing
If you stop my tears from flowing
But you have to really show me
When I cry you'll forever hold me.
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concrete_rose
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2005-02-28 21:19:13]
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Re: Hear My Tears
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by paula_kay23 on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 10:07:23 PM AEST
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wow, very nice, very deep.
loved the 4th verse it is true to life for me i have been the immature insecure one and recently realised my ways.
i hope you get through to the person it is meant for, if not keep trying u will get there xx |
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Re: Hear My Tears
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 10:42:17 PM AEST
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| there was only one thing i found wrong in this and it was the use of the same word to rhyme with another one. i am very impressed with this poem. |
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Re: Hear My Tears
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 05:59:15 PM AEST
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PERFECT!!!! Another masterpiece added to your vast collection, concrete rose!! I loved this piece! The need for your lover's touch, healing hand... Yeah, I think we all can relate. Beautiful and sad. I hope yit all gets better for you, honey. All my love. Forever,
Your avid fan and friend,
Stephy~! *Fleur* |
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Re: Hear My Tears
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by rubytears on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 11:28:20 AM AEST
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that was ... unbeliveably perfect
i hope that some day i can write as well as that
wow
~*rubytears*~ |
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