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End
Contributed by
lostinside
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Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 01:04:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I wanna die
someday
But not
on this world
Not in this world
as the force moves closer
With silent he comes
And we can't stop it
It's to slow
To see
It's to fast
To understand
As the force comes
The world comes
To an end
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2005-02-27 13:04:57]
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Re: End
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by heartquake on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 02:24:27 PM AEST
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| what i got from this write was, allbeit just in my opinion, first was that you wanna reach a higher level of personal completion before you die... like by saying 'i wanna die but not on this world' to me is like saying i don't wanna die with my life like it is.... like you are wishing to do something more, something to be remembered by before you go.... and the second thing i got from it was my sci-fi side thinking for me, you want to help a buncha people leave the earth before the end of the world and watch it collapse from the stars... weird I know.... if i were you i'd go with my first explanation lol.... good write |
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Re: End
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 03:59:11 PM AEST
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I like this. I hope to go back with Christ before I die, but only the Father knows.
You need to learn the difference between to and too, to make this work though.
Stitch |
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Re: End
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 04:51:11 PM AEST
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| needs a lot of work. |
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Re: End
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 05:38:11 PM AEST
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it's happening phill sooner than we think
nice write . . . Dorian Chambes |
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Re: End
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by dormen on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 03:15:21 AM AEST
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I'm very sorry., but I don't like this poem at all. There is no such thing as a force that is threathening the world. The only dark forces exist in the hearths of people who are untrue and are seeking for helpless victims to take them down in their fall.
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