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Niche
Contributed by
fielding88
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Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 12:54:59 PM in AEST
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Frustrated and alone.
That’s all I have to say
About a period of time
in this godforsaken life,
Brought about by the past few days.
Things have crumbled from under my feet,
No place to go but down.
I’ve built my niche on shade and fog,
No hope of being found.
I’m falling into nothing,
A gap so infamous to me.
Where I have no place to go,
No person inside to be.
A life so great, so full of joy.
To me, owned beauty abound.
Yet with its foundation so dark and grim,
Its end should not astound.
I fall and fall, and fall again,
Nobody to lend a hand.
I was foolish to think that the life I had
Could have been built upon the sand.
I see where I am and where I was so clear.
That place now far from me.
I long so deeply to reach it again,
It is the place I know I must be.
Down I go, until I stop.
I made this mistake, I know.
Nothing new since I fell from the top,
And now I must take control.
This drop my fault, deservingly so,
The sorrow I feel now growing.
I look up at my world, once all I knew,
And the lie I lived now showing.
I wallow in grief of things to blame,
But it’s squarely on my head.
I must decide to accept the pain,
And leave my past, now dead.
I turn, look down, and see what’s ahead
For the first time in all my life.
A feeling of renewal, of life so true,
This feeling of release so new.
My future detested, my past embraced
Have led me this far, I know.
Now, with change, I realize,
The future is where I must go.
This future in front of me, where I plummet to
Is, like the past, far away,
But now I have a plan of action
To find my niche someday.
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fielding88
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Re: Niche
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by breny on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 02:12:24 PM AEST
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wow this is really powerful.
You capture your emotions really well in this poem, marc.
Great job :-D
~Brenna~ |
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Re: Niche
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 07:54:45 PM AEST
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wow very powerful and emotional write.
awsome job kiddo. |
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Re: Niche
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 03:28:06 PM AEST
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Now here's a deep and really rather inspiring piece. I think many of us reach such a point as this in life. It's a hard thing to face, but the outcome says it all.
Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Niche
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by Red_October on
Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 07:57:15 PM AEST
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| really good...like a plan intended for savior of self - well thought and established in between words. i enjoyed this muchly. Tiffany J |
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Re: Niche
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 07:08:50 PM AEST
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I've been writing (if you can call it that) of that place for a few months now. I sooooooo understand why you set the pen down for a few months... I have all but done so myself.
This is the perfect way to turn the page, shift your focus and end the hiatus. It is abundantly obvious why you were able to do so. Wonderfully expressed and, dare I say, inspirational. I'm just hoping I don't have to wait a few more months for it, you know?
Well done, Marc!
~SNM~
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Re: Niche
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 02:06:53 PM AEST
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I can see it was bad, nice to have a hopeful ending.
well done!!! |
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Re: Niche
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by Rxqueen on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 07:59:39 PM AEST
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Great metaphors! Nice job!!!!! It had a purpose.
Things have crumbled from under my feet,
No place to go but down.
I’ve built my niche on shade and fog,
No hope of being found. |
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Re: Niche
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 09:28:54 PM AEST
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lol, todays your day. =]
I totally loved how your poem
tasted....duuuuude! |
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Re: Niche
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 09:32:57 PM AEST
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| now, for the serious comment. =] i loved this poem. not surprising really. this was brilliant. your style and tone were amazing. your first stanza was really powerful and made me not want to stop reading your poem. your last stanza was hopeful, and since im not an optomist, i didnt like that too much, but thats just because pessimists cant stand optomism, lol. maybe the niche will find you someday.... |
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Re: Niche
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th March 2009 @ 08:10:55 PM AEST
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Sorry, I wasn't here in February of 2005. Didn't join until April 2005, so I have a lot of catching up to do... or maybe better put, my discoveries still await me.
Anyway, it's interesting how as I look at the post date and think of what I was doing around that time and it seems we were at some kind of parallel... or at least, we were having similar experiences and thoughts.
Anyway, this is a very nice poem. Very, um, contemplative.
Nicely done.
Take care and blessings to you.
Tim |
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