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I'm Not Made To Shine
Contributed by
xXcrossedXx
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Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 10:22:50 PM in AEST
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I want a life that isn't mine,
I want to grow dim,
I don't want to shine,
To be happy or win.
I want a family that hits and yells
I want a friend that always tells.
I want a knife to hide my secrets,
And a drawer to burry the pills.
I need a notebook to keep track of wills.
I need a memory that always forgives but never forgets,
I need parents that always fight
A single phone call the will ruin the night.
I want a life that isn't mine,
I want to grow dim,
I don't want to shine,
To be happy or win.
I need the tragedies to cry myself to sleep.
I need the glass to dig in too deep.
I need everyone to disappear
So I can feel as if no one cares.
I want to become so depressed I'm not afraid of dares.
I want to fall in and out of love,
I want to feel like there's no God up above,
So that I'm not scared to take my life.
I want a life that's no longer mine
I want to crawl back, turn the light dim,
I don't want it to shine,
I hate being happy, I can't let myself win.
I want an attempt to succeed.
I need to make sense of my words,
I want to hide in all my masks
So I don't have to speak when someone asks.
I want a life to eat me up inside
I need someone to uncover the things I hide.
I want to realize who I am
So I can have the life I need.
I want a life that's no longer mine
I want to crawl back, turn the light dim,
I don't want to shine,
I hate being happy, I can't let myself win.
I want the life that's left me
The one that's taught and raised me
Up until a year ago when all feeling was gone,
And now it will never come back,
For the light will stay on.
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Stellar on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 10:25:51 PM AEST
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I absolutely love the last stanza!! Excellent write!
Take care ~Stellar |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 10:31:02 PM AEST
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An incredibly moving write. Very nicely done.
Take Care
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by allforyou on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 10:35:42 PM AEST
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Excuse my language, but that was ***** amazing. You are such a great writer. You wrote what I myself feel everyday, but i can't get it out as poetically as you do!
--Kara |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 11:07:19 PM AEST
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| Interesting perspecetive on happiness- Sometimes we crave for the intensities of life, others long for peace. |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 11:12:53 PM AEST
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Very intence yet honest nice peice of writting.
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Kuro_Mirai on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 11:53:35 PM AEST
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| Very great write. Much better then anything I could ever write. Your a great writer. |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 12:09:24 AM AEST
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| Phenominal Write Amanda!....I loved it all....Beautiful ending too....Completly and utterly Amazing....Great job =] |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Mangs on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 05:02:27 AM AEST
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| amazing....its only when u love the imperfections that u begin to look at life differently...happened to me too...nice work. |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 05:39:53 AM AEST
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| wow, this is do how i feel.. amazing!!! |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by xXx_lil_pyro_xXx on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 02:38:01 PM AEST
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| That poem matched my former attitude towards life so precisely it made my stomach churn! Great write Amanda. |
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Re: I'm Not Made To Shine
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 01:36:58 PM AEST
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| What a relatable piece of artwork you have here! There's something about this that I can just so easily relate to and it has so many things that I wish for all the time. The ending was so strong, that light had better stay on! lol, this is just something you should totally be proud of, and I think I like this poem over all your others, by far. I'm dead serious, I think you've struck gold here with this idea. I could go on and on about how great this poem is, but I think I'd get annoying in a few moments time, lol. Amazingly amazing work!!! |
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