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You Did Not See
Contributed by
pixie
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Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 01:09:38 PM in AEST
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All my tears you did not see,
You never saw the state of me,
After you walked out of my life,
It’d hurt less if you’d stuck in a knife.
I wept far into the night,
You weren’t there you had no sight,
I was alone in a world of blue tears,
Battling by myself with hurt, pain & fears.
I rang your phone but you ignored,
That drove devastation into my cores,
I pictured you lay with another,
No longer was I your best friend & lover.
I thought you’d gone & you’d never come back,
So in my nightmare I faded to black,
I had no willing or wanting to go on living,
I thought your heart would be more forgiving.
I never realised how much damage I had done,
As my demons were having too much fun,
They destroyed my love then left me alone,
I hurt my love when you wouldn’t answer your phone.
I thought that was really it for you & I,
All I could do was sit there & cry,
Memories were painful but in they did flood,
Ripping at my heart as I knew they would.
Everything reminded me of us,
Memories wouldn’t settle into the dust,
They kept on going around & around,
Then they just dropped me to die on the ground.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2005-02-25 13:09:38]
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Re: You Did Not See
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by Dusty on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 01:35:26 PM AEST
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Just too sad. I think we have all had someone do us this way. It's great that you can write about it.
Dusty~ |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 02:55:44 PM AEST
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you are soooo good at this type of poem.
Good poets have truley suffered in the past and come out the other side.
your work reflects this.
Excellent.
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Re: You Did Not See
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 03:18:53 PM AEST
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Awwww hun...this is so sad it breaks my heart.
You do do some fabulous writing when you are down, too. But I really wish you could be happy.
*huggies* Phil xxx |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 06:55:21 PM AEST
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| awwww krisse..sad write write, but oh so well done! |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 09:26:21 PM AEST
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as always straight from the heart pix, sad but beautiful . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by Mangs on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 10:16:08 AM AEST
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| sad...yet so beautiful... |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by xtremcalibur on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 12:13:31 PM AEST
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| I liked your poem because most of us can relate to what you feel. A bit lengthy, but it didn't take away from the concept. |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 04:01:09 PM AEST
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This is so sad, but so well written as always...
Pixie, your talent shines thru all your writes...happy or sad...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: You Did Not See
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 03:28:49 PM AEST
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This one reminds me of something...ohhh yeah it was what i felt when you know who left i do feel this sometimes.
Ok before i mumble like a mad woman that i am, id just like to tell you Krissie that you one heck of an amazing poet and you do make me feel everything you write which makes you a great writer.
Good poem hun.
Hugs,
Jane ^_^
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