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Youth Denied
Contributed by
quill_and_ink
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Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 09:14:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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I know your type,
I know your sort,
You get into power
and sell youth short.
Don't care about,
Our generation,
only about wealth,
and your corperation.
Leave us gasping,
For fresh air,
On the streets,
Consumed by despair.
You don't think,
that we have opinions.
Just that you are our ruler,
we are your minions.
But you just wait,
For youth's hour,
When we will rule,
and overthrow your power!
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Re: Youth Denied
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by Wesley_Dale_Willis on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 09:23:29 PM AEST
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| You started off great, the things to help your poetry are. Try to type a poem in a even meter through each line. In other words keep the syllibles the same. Line one if it has 4 syllibles then make line 2 have 4 syllibles. Try to write in iambs if you can, in other words start the first syllible with a unstressed one then the second syllible stressed. Try this evenly unstressed, then stressed,then unstressed, then stressed. Do you understand? |
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Re: Youth Denied
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by tractorbabe on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:32:32 AM AEST
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| awsome...very clever...i like it ...great poem |
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Re: Youth Denied
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by lady-quiet-dreamer on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 11:50:02 PM AEST
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| it is very well thought. very well written also. |
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Re: Youth Denied
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by quill_and_ink on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 03:46:01 AM AEST
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| Thanks for your feedback...yeah i realise that this poem is not very good. I dont know why i wrote it - i was bored and just made one up on the spot. But thanks for your comments:) |
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