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Strip Mind
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:38:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Steal from me my spirit free
And I shall haunt your waking dreams
Moments of lucidity spent hearing silent screams
Visions of disembodied voices
Reflective reasoning relieved
You will feel stones of emotion
Hurtled at your heart
Until your knees grow weak
Before they buckle and break
As you discover they were never really there
In the first place
Tear from me creativity
And I shall exercise that muscle
Back to health and form
Harnessing the energies of kinetic kindness
Distortions of deluded decisions
I will visit terror upon the galleries of glamour
That you find so completely comforting
Van Ghoul will become the artist of choice
Multi-dimensional masterpieces
Desperate measures of feet
Depicting dismembered decay
Strip from me my sanity
And I shall run disrobed
Through your mind
Paying homage to the inner sanctum
That I have worshiped for so long
Leaving offerings of offal
Self-defacing sacrifices
Bile dripping Beethovanesque
Down your honeysuckle walls
And unlike the master I will choose to be deaf
Unable to hear your protestations
Take from me mentality
And I shall occupy a corner of your soul
A black hole feeding on your will
Demagnetizing your desires
Polarizing your pleasures
Tainting your reflective outlook
Emptying your world of precious metals
Painting my presence in poppy colored pastels
Causing introverted interests
Illustrating a withdrawn shell
That you, with me, may share this hell
Separate me from my dreams
And I shall finally
Be at peace
( I don't know where this voice came from, but it spoke for 20 minutes last night and I had to write furiously to keep up, but I think I got it all ... )
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Nazmythian
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Re: Strip Mind
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:39:22 AM AEST
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hey Nazzy I hope that voice comes back again that was brilliant, amazing and WOW :)
pix xx |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by LadyWynter on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:54:15 AM AEST
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Sigh
There are no words to desribe that poem, it is beyond amazing! If I ever get to be half as good as you, I will be satisfied. Really wonderful write! :-D
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Re: Strip Mind
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by bethie on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:54:42 AM AEST
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| Whoa! Some write. Interesting imagery. |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:00:00 PM AEST
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Painting my presence in poppy colored pastels
I love this line. Now, buddy you got so much here, and I could go so many different directions with it. A fascinating write worthy of several reads.
Stitch
PS, I think satan is living in these lines. |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:01:11 PM AEST
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He's gone mad..!!
Run everyone, Nazzy is insane!
Lmao.
Well... it's what I got from this anyway.
Strip from me my sanity
And I shall run disrobed
Through your mind
I just love that bit for some reason.
Great write hunni.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:09:34 PM AEST
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OK Now I am seriously questioning your origin.
This is amazing! Like a well focused rambling or speaking in tounges...how do you do it????
Maybe you have an alien muse!!!!
Awsome job buddy!!! |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Greg_Skellington on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:43:57 PM AEST
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FREAK, naw just playing....this is great, but im pretty sure the Dark One is trying to use you. i read this and got a burning sensation in one of my scars on my arm. that was freaky. i gotta say, w/e that voice was its not holy...im not either but i dont care....im looking forward to reading all the voices in youre head, keep writing them down.
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by wyrd_faerie on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 03:21:47 PM AEST
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| this is incredible...and it's not satan, it's just a dark voice inside you. beautiful...you should listen to it more...xxx |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 04:08:11 PM AEST
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Wow...wow....just...wow. lol. I can't find words, cheri... This is...perfect. More when words form. All my love. Forever,
Your friend,
Stephy. |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 06:12:28 PM AEST
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| cool |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 06:29:22 PM AEST
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Last night I also heard "voices".
I think it was from the beans.
It is cool stuff,
glad to see you experimenting
and producing a positive result.
I honestly can't fully fathom this
on one read,
but it's one worth taking a better look at
on paper later on.
Some places remind me of Jim Morrison,
others like Trent Reznor's monologue
on "I Do Not Want This".
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Les4567 on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:25:44 PM AEST
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This was amazing. You have an unbelieveably great talent. I always enjoy reading your work, and cant wait to read more. Whatever you do do not i repeat do not stop writing. You are amazing i cant say it enough i dont have the words to describe your ability.
Awesome write Nazzy
~Leslie
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 11:31:26 PM AEST
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| an amazing write from an amazing poet. |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Dusty on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 02:07:12 PM AEST
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Awesome write! Wherever this voice came from give him my address!!! I would keep it around for sure!
~Dusty~ |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 26th February 2005 @ 09:39:26 AM AEST
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Naz, your creative genius just keeps blossoming. This poem is so full of imagery. To tell the truth, it was somewhat overwhelming for me to read.....like there is so much there, I couldn't grasp it all. Which is just further tribute to your talent.
There are poems and there are POEMS! Yours sir, is a POEM
Willofree, Terry |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 12:43:28 PM AEST
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AAAAAAAAA!!!!!! That voice! That ever daunting
voice that visits us in the depths of the unknown. Glad it visited YOU this time. Maybe now it'll leave ME alone!
Great exression of the inner darkness that hides amid us all! |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 02:13:11 PM AEST
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Well, this voice is a bit forbidding, but intriguing. And the piece is very well placed and written. Nicely done, my friend.
Your wording is really quite masterful.
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd March 2005 @ 02:13:31 PM AEST
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fascinating experience when you feel the words are not your own.. I enjoyed the read.
Thanks! |
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Re: Strip Mind
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 5th March 2005 @ 08:30:44 PM AEST
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Well i am not sure what "mental channel
surfing" is but whatever it is it produced a
great poem. I enjoyed the alliteration and the
whole thing in general.
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Re: Strip Mind
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by freckle on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 04:55:18 PM AEST
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Very, very good. I love the imagery and the darkness just keeps you hanging on for more.....Yes, the Voice. I think every true poet hears it now and again! Great job Nazzy!
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Re: Strip Mind
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by Rxqueen on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 07:38:45 PM AEST
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You will feel stones of emotion
Hurtled at your heart
Until your knees grow weak
Before they buckle and break
As you discover they were never really there
In the first place
I loved that.
This was so powerful and emotionally driven. Embrace the voice, it rocks.
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Re: Strip Mind
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 06:01:27 AM AEST
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Remarkable writing or should I saY CAPTURING.
HUGGS,
EMY |
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