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Lost in the fog
Contributed by
MnMnMsrcool
on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:37:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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With a heavy heart
and a tear finding its way down my cheek
I turn my back
and hope everything is ok
I don't know what to do
as an awkwardness
surrounds me
engulfing me in a heavy fog
making it hard to breath
Guilt starts to block my veins
As I'm getting suffocated
people are getting hurt
people I care about
I lash out
In a desperate measure
to feel something
something of the old me
and I only hope that this isnt me
That I'm not out to hurt
hurt the only people
that know who i can be
I don't know who I am
Copyright ©
MnMnMsrcool
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2005-02-22 22:37:14]
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Re: Lost in the fog
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:55:51 PM AEST
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i liked much of this. i would especially like to see more of this type of writing...
"an awkwardness
surrounds me
engulfing me in a heavy fog
making it hard to breath
Guilt starts to block my veins
As I'm getting suffocated" i like vagueness in poems. the entire thing doesnt need to be vague, but even a bit, leaves something to the imagination and gives depth to what otherwise would be a shallow poem.
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Re: Lost in the fog
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 09:46:36 AM AEST
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you expressed yourself well, I hope that the fog clears for you soon,
pix xx |
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