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Secret Place
Contributed by
VirtuosoB13
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Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:26:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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It's in that secret place that I find you/ The place where it matters not what our minds do/ Because my every thought seems to include you/ And I will admit that at first I thought that this had to be vodoo/ Cuz no one can pull my strings quite the same way that you do/ U see the connection that we share is so much deeper than the "hey baby's" and the " I love you so much"/ It's like I could glance across a room, catch the sparkle in your eye and feel our souls touch/ But not only do they touch, U see they intertwine into a vine that can only be defined as the tree of life that yields the fruit of every emotion I've ever felt for you/ And it's amazing how only time can chart the destiny that has been dealt for you/ Cuz I know that we are meant to be together/ So we can handle the strong winds and the stormy weather/ Cuz whether we're in the ghetto lookin for our next meal or in a twenty bedroom house on knod hill, there is no denying that what God told me is real/ U see, when he spoke you into my life it was like suddenly you were there and everything became right/ But of course I went left because my own problems, they didn't seem to go away/ It was like life on top of new life was making me real afraid/ But I feel good about our struggles, cuz it's the hard work that makes it worth being paid/ In that secret place/ U see being able to only love you in my heart is like being locked inside of paradise/ It's like God is trying to test us and He has us in his hand and rocks us like a pair of dice/ But I've learned not to worry that it feels like we're being tossed around in the sea/ Because I realized that just like those dice, we have the same numbers/ And they read "1...4...3"/
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Re: Secret Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by dis1379 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:43:10 PM AEST (User
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This poem is excellent!! I love how you allow the reader to go to that secret place with you. Great writing, great use of the metaphoric language!!! |
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Re: Secret Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by bethie on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:44:37 PM AEST (User
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I see that you have felt that strong pull or connection with someone too. This was very good and nice flowing. Nice work. |
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Re: Secret Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by mypetmeatball on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 03:16:52 PM AEST (User
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I can tell where your user name "Virtuoso" is derived from. Nice work.
Is this intended to be spoken word? That's the impression I got...spoken with emotion and flourish this would be absolutely brilliant. If this wasn't your initially your intention, you should definitely consider it. |
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Re: Secret Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by Whisper on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 08:26:15 PM AEST (User
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I really like this . I almost feel like I was prying. I have often had up and downs with a secret few in a secret place some time ago.
Really nice write I am glad that you still have each other
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