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LOVING YOU
Contributed by
lemmen
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Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:05:52 AM in AEST
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My life was wasting away untill
The day you came into my life
You brought me more than love
You brought me peace and hope
For a better tomorrow
A life of joy
You showed me that even with my diease
There can be a better today.
A better life
I wish i could show you with more than just words
I shall tell you I Love You everyday and always
May you know that this is true
There will be days that seem like i'm drifting away
But i'm not
This body feels old
But your love makes it new
You make me anew
I am Alive once more
My life i live for you
Always know that i will forever be here by your side
And from everyday that we shall spend
Form now till forever
May you read these words
And know the love
That i have for you shall always be
Shall always grow
Shall never fade away
You are my sweet
My greatest love
You are my wife
My angel that God has sent me from above
Never has one given show much to me
than what you have.
These words are just an expression of what i feel inside
They are just letters of words
In which can not speck
This is my heart
You are my heart
You are the greatest love that a man could ever have
That this man has ever knowen.
Thank you my love for giving me
The power
The strength
To carry on.
In life
Love Dennis
BY DENNIS LEMMEN
Copyright ©
lemmen
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2005-02-22 01:05:52]
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:08:40 AM AEST
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| Lovely piece :-) |
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by mypetmeatball on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:22:18 AM AEST
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Thought is nice, style of writing is nice.
Word choice is a bit cliche. Rework the poem and make the language represent you. Some lines seem like they could be out of a greeting card.
This is constructive criticism, I see good things coming from this, just make it more personal...good luck |
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by LadyWynter on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:42:19 AM AEST
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| I thought this piece was very loving, full of sentiment and emotion. It is always nice to see when someone has that special person in their life that they can share such a true bond with. |
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 12:08:27 PM AEST
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loving and sentimental Dennis, loved this
pix xx |
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 12:20:38 PM AEST
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This was so beautiful.. I felt love and compassion and most of all friendship. This was a really beautiful poem dennis!! Keep writing, never give up!
Blessed be
christina |
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Re: LOVING YOU
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by THORN on
Thursday, 13th October 2005 @ 07:43:23 AM AEST
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW, that is so sweet!!!!! Perfect write!! 5 stars!!
Keep it up!! Write of love, not :)
Love,
-xXRayeXx |
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