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Mom
Contributed by
jjones12
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Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 06:39:23 PM in AEST
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FamilyPoems
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i miss the old you,
all the things you use to do,
you use to smile,
but you haven't for a while ,
i know grandma is dying,
and you think you have to be crying,
but you can laugh,
and make craphs,
you can be happy,
even when things are so going crappy,
you're bringing me down,
even if you have just a frown,
i'm trying,
but all of this crying,
it's like she is already dead,
because all of your faces are red,
she doesn't want to spend the rest of the time she has left worring about that sarrowful day,
even if the day is gray,
lets show her the love we have for her,
i don't know if she knows for sure,
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Re: Mom
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 06:49:43 PM AEST
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Worry, is like a rocking chair...it gives you something to do, but gets you no where...
Good poem...
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Re: Mom
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by dreamer_4_eternity on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 06:51:06 PM AEST
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| really good, emotional, and its right, you should savor the time you have left with a loved one... keep writing and you'll get even better! Good write |
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Re: Mom
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by tomt102444 on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 07:47:31 PM AEST
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| I liked the sentiment of the poem jj but, it was a little difficult to read because it lacked rhythm - ie long lines rhymning with short made it somewhat choppy. A minor suggestion: check your spelling. Look forward to see more from you. tom |
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Re: Mom
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by LOWMAN613 on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 12:07:35 AM AEST
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| I wish I had my mother here still cherish the days! Christina |
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