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falling
Contributed by
wyrd_faerie
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Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 01:17:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I used to sit and gaze at the midnight sky
Believing with every inch of me we were immortal
Using fingertips instead of eyes in inky darkness
And my kisses would land on your skin, so gentle
Falling deeper and deeper into you
But now the only things that fall are these tears
Such a hollow, cold comfort
And I crave the warmth of your skin to hold me
To envelop my senses, to sweep me away
And I think this is the end
The empty, passive moving apart of two souls
I always expected storms and thunder
But it’s just the never-ending, intermittent pitter-patter
Of all the tears we ever cried,
Trying to break down my window and get inside
And I’ll let you go
Close my eyes, and with an aching heart
Whisper my last goodbyes
Because this love was never eternity
It always felt too much like the haunting serenade
Of the first polluting thought of suicide
I shiver in bed, alone
My body feels redundant, with nothing to hold
Gentle fingertips and secrets in the middle of the night
Are only a fading memory
And as romantic as we try to be
Eventually we will both forget
Goodbye, my darling
This midnight sky looks so hollow
I’m engraving your name into this skin
That you will never touch again
One last futile effort
To hold you close
But we are dying
And your heart is cold
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Re: falling
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by Mangs on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 01:27:44 PM AEST
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| Wow.....this is one of the best pieces ive ever read on this site......and i could relate to every word uve written....very well done.... |
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Re: falling
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by ArseCrust on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 02:52:04 PM AEST
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| I love this poem so much!!!!!! |
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Re: falling
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by Moonglow on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 04:06:29 PM AEST
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| That was off the chain...... |
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Re: falling
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 01:42:38 PM AEST
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| darling, darling. i wish i could do something. i wish i could hold you. i love you, and although i try to ignore it, it hurts to see you aching for her. you were both so, so beautiful together. you were, to each other, everything i wanted in a friend. and it's over now, it can't be the same, because things don't last forever. and love dies, and you will, eventually, forget what it was like to love her. but that doesnt mean i dont know how much she meant to you, means to you. and im sorry things have turned out like this.im here for you, as always, forever. i love you. xxx |
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Re: falling
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 06:37:26 PM AEST
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Beautiful Lucie I am glad you are writing
again and at the same time I am not, your
poems are all so refreshing and well-written,
but so sad and I know I've said this before,
but I wish I could take your pain away.
The imagery in this poem was startling and
yeah wow I am not sure what else to say
besides that since whatever I say can never
do this poem justice.
*Hugs*
Joel |
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Re: falling
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by Cancer on
Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 12:39:53 AM AEST
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"And as romantic as we try to be
Eventually we will both forget"
the whole scrawl was ***** beautiful, but those two lines especially struck me, because they are more true than most people would like to admit. amazing.
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Re: falling
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by M on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 12:46:41 PM AEST
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Lucie. oh lucie i genuinly don't know what to say.
I don't want to be so presumptuous As to assume this poem is for me, becuase i can imagine it may be for someone else. The words are so true though. i miss you.
And i still love you
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Re: falling
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by Jaz17 on
Saturday, 1st October 2005 @ 04:39:02 AM AEST
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| Your words are beautiful... they bring a tear to my eyes... take care... sending you smiles xx |
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Re: falling
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by Cancer on
Sunday, 10th June 2007 @ 10:22:35 PM AEST
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i'm gonna use a new word, here we go....this was ***** smashing. smashing was the new word, not *****. anyway, this was absolute perfection. it's true, love doesn't end with a bang, the way we expect, but with a whimper and a tear.
"And as romantic as we try to be
Eventually we will both forget"
i really like the painful truth of this line. i'd say more but i'm already gushing. incredible scrawl.
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