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Double Nightmare....
Contributed by
Sonibe
on
Friday, 13th December 2002 @ 04:20:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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You're walking to the store
and you see a big truck spinning in the road
coming your way.
*Your left side goes numb but you manage
to jump out of the way, and the truck hits the
person behind you and they both go flying
about 50 yards ahead of you.
Concerned, you follow the ambulance to the
hospital. You ask the nurses where the truck
victim was and what room he/she was in,
but everyone there ignores you as if you
weren't even there.
You decide to look for him/her on your own,
and you find a door that you haven't seen
before. Curiously, you open the door and
step inside the dark room and turn on the
lights. You suddenly find yourself falling from
the 4th floor of the hospital, outside.
Just before you hit the bottom, **you wake up
and you're in the hospital....on the 4th floor.
You look at you're family next to you, crying,
and then you ask them, "What's going on,
and what are you doing here?" They look at
you and cry even louder. You take off the
bandages from your face and look in the
mirror, to find that part of your face was
caved. Then, surprized, you lay back down
and listen to the machine that checks your
heart beat (beep beep....beep beep, etc.).
And then it stops, then goes continuously
(beeeeeee...etc.), your family looks at you
and cries once again.
You give up, and relax....but then, you wake up
walking on the same road going to the store.
You look down the road and you see a big
truck spinning on the road, and it is all
happening....again.
Copyright ©
Sonibe
... [
2002-12-13 04:20:00]
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by gina on
Friday, 13th December 2002 @ 06:05:08 AM AEST
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touching........i didnt know this was coming,gr8 poem full of sad surprises.
hope it won't happen to any of us ....GINA |
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by GEQUETSCHT on
Friday, 13th December 2002 @ 04:17:07 PM AEST
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dude.. great poem
"hier kommt die sonne"
¤Ali¤ |
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by Delusions on
Saturday, 14th December 2002 @ 06:29:42 AM AEST
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Oh wow, i liked this one alot....keep it up
~Delusions~ |
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by yellow_sundragon on
Saturday, 14th December 2002 @ 01:41:45 PM AEST
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I like this one, twisted endings and even more twisted content. It's beautiful.
YS |
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by OreO on
Saturday, 14th December 2002 @ 02:11:09 PM AEST
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Wow i thought at first this was going to be one of those the truck really hit you to begin with and you are dead in the beginning thing but noooo it ends up being full of surprises left and right....i love the way this poem is layed out.....it's very dark and sad and has a very sad ending ....your talent truly shines through this poem, thanks for sharing this one i enjoyed reading it...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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Re: Double Nightmare....
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by Hiddendarkness1705 on
Thursday, 24th July 2003 @ 11:58:35 AM AEST
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| This is amazing. It makes you think and pulls you in. I think this is just amazing and you need talent to be able to write like this. |
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