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Falling Star.
Contributed by
Lozza
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Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 07:43:55 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Falling Star!
Now that you have gone away,
And that the night’s devoured day,
I look to the sky and there’s your face,
High above this human race.
In the stars your eyes I see,
Looking down and watching me,
Until the night does turn to day,
I know that you wont go away.
Looking back on where we’ve been,
What we’ve done and where we’ve seen,
I know that death was not your choice,
Now what I hear is not your voice.
Now it’s about time to carry on,
Loved by all, forgot by none,
So never forget just who you are,
Here’s to you…… My falling star!
Laura 13
Copyright ©
Lozza
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2005-02-18 07:43:55]
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Re: Falling Star.
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by Stitch on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 08:56:17 AM AEST
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I think this is lovely. It's well written and sweet. Nice work.
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Re: Falling Star.
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by thecutter on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 09:51:36 AM AEST
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lovely poem, really flows.
i look forward to reading more of your work.
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Re: Falling Star.
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th February 2005 @ 10:55:41 AM AEST
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This is very well done! It flows nicely and has almost a sweet/ sad sentiment.
Well done !! |
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Re: Falling Star.
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Monday, 28th February 2005 @ 11:27:32 AM AEST
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Very sweet. It was easy to read, follow and
enjoy. Simple wording, not a bad thing in this case.
4 out of 5
are you 13?
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Re: Falling Star.
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by Lozza on
Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 10:39:11 AM AEST
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Thanks for your comments!
It really helped me please look at my other poems and also comment on them [if you want to]
and yeah i am 13
Love
L a u r a |
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