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The sickness. . . . ?
Contributed by
MaRy_JaNe_420
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Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 10:54:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Im sick of you not listening to me, Im sick of never being heard.
I'm sick of you pretending like you now how I feel when you havent heard a word
I'm sick of getting made fun of how I dress
Im sick of caring and dealing with your mess
I'm sick of being looked at weird and caring what you say
Im sick of hearing "Only God can save you" and "You really need to pray"
I'm sick of people's problems, And feeling I should care
I'm sick of not knowing what to think because I was never there
I'm sick of being on the outside looking in
I'm sick of telling my story and not knowing where to begin.
I'm sick of JUST being "cute" or "just another friend"
I'm sick of looking in your eyes and not knowing when it will end
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Re: The sickness. . . . ?
(User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:00:34 PM AEST
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| overall this was brilliant. though you need not repeat "I'm sick of" so often. i liked your substance though. it was so good, that i didnt even notice the repetition to over well half way through, most of the time i notice within the first two lines. so a sharp contrast to the competition. |
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Re: The sickness. . . . ?
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by sojourner on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:16:29 PM AEST
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I liked your poem,I think the"I'm sick of'" gives power to your poem and I'm sure some of the readers of your write might vent by reading it aloud.
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Re: The sickness. . . . ?
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by sojourner on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 11:16:32 PM AEST
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I liked your poem,I think the"I'm sick of'" gives power to your poem and I'm sure some of the readers of your write might vent by reading it aloud.
sojourner, |
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Re: The sickness. . . . ?
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by Rhymingron on
Sunday, 20th February 2005 @ 08:20:10 AM AEST
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| Good poem. |
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