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Dying in the moonlight (love and vomit)
Contributed by
iodinelove
on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 04:06:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The world has passed me by.
The night is a dry day
dying in the moonlight.
The rain is a last song
singing softer than forever.
I laugh my vomit my love
my independence.
I laugh my hands
my hands laugh fingers playing
across the keyboard.
In crowded rooms
on crowded sofas
I am alone
standing at the door.
The door is pouring rain
painting the fog with
its ashes and plain
white paint.
The door surrounds me
suffocates me
slips and falls
and captures me.
The door is my mountain
my crowning achievements
her beautiful breasts against
my chest my grievance
her pale dimensions
riding above
clawing at the windows.
The corner stirs
a spider spins her web
spins serenity
longevity
and pain.
The world continues
and I am still,
cradling her kisses
her ash and
plain black
mess of hair.
Copyright ©
iodinelove
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2005-02-15 04:06:56]
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Re: Dying in the moonlight (love and vomit)
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 04:13:14 AM AEST
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| wow very unique, original, very interesting, intriguing, i liked that i didnt have the slightest ***** about what it was about other than phsicotic emotions in a metaphorical context, very good, you are feeding me a subcncious message, but whatever it is it feels good, well done xxxxxxxxxjazzxxxxxxxxxxxxxx :D |
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Re: Dying in the moonlight (love and vomit)
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by noone on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 07:26:53 AM AEST
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Amazing...this is a truely magnificant write! It is so emotional and unique. I am happy i took time to read this, it was great. I agree with the other comment, i can feel their is a message being displayed but i can't quite grasp it. Please keep writing more!
Kirsty x |
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